Ill Hectic vs. FatalX

[FatalX]

8-10 bars
house rules
I'll post after Ill hectic

[Ill-hectic]

There aint nothing fatal about you X besyd ur dead scripts...fuck rhymes dude i hold lota punches than boxing refrees...the only time you will cum positive against me is wen ur status states u got aids...X evn if u drop ur faeces on topa flat,u wudnt top my shit...the typa shit im droping is kicking lyk baselines stuck on toilets...lyk female clowns on periods ur flow is just a joke...ima lyricaly force a pope's undawear in ur ass so u drop holy shit...dude u cnt handle my dopeness lyk drug lords with no hands...lyk ur tongue on menstruation you suck period...ima get rid of this X lyk fatal of my previous bitch

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[Haz]

wait.. point out what rhymed LMAO

[Ill-hectic]

Haz,lol, concetrate on the punchlines n wordplay deeply

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[FatalX]

ill hectics so wack that when he raps in the mirror
his reflection just laughs,and ask why hes here//
see what happens is clear,and its ok to feel threatened
because you know Ill hang you up like phones on bill collecters//
see ya.......style is,what most of us would call lame
and only one word comes to mind for every punch you wrote PLAYED//
but don't be afraid,just try to find a written balance
what else can I do when I battle the mentally challenged//
but try to encourage him and then try not to embarrass him
then keep em off my nuts,cause this is borderline harrassment//
its almost sexual......thats why I can't let it slide
what you wrote was irritating,like a fat chics inner thighs//
and if thats the best that youve got,you should find a new hobby
cause the only rap career you can get,is handing flyers out in a lobby//
your either stupid or sloppy,you should learn how to spell
don't they have spell check,for when you write on a cell//

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[Alvin]

There aint nothing fatal about you X besyd ur dead scripts...
fuck rhymes dude i hold lota punches than boxing refrees...
the only time you will cum positive against me is wen ur status states u got aids...
X evn if u drop ur faeces on topa flat,u wudnt top my shit...
the typa shit im droping is kicking lyk baselines stuck on toilets...
lyk female clowns on periods ur flow is just a joke...
ima lyricaly force a pope's undawear in ur ass so u drop holy shit...
dude u cnt handle my dopeness lyk drug lords with no hands...
lyk ur tongue on menstruation you suck period...
ima get rid of this X lyk fatal of my previous bitch

Although there was evidence of wordplay, maybe some things that could be considered a name flip, It was entirely to difficult to break down bar by bar, so the above quote is the best i could come up with. Which only leaves you with 5 bars. Automatic loss right there. But ill dig deeper for proper feedback. I'm very dumbstruck by all the intentional misspelling. You had some good lines or better said concepts, but more effective when worded better. The flow was non existent. Rhyme scheme was rather off. Favorite line of yours was "lyk ur tongue on menstruation you suck period"

ill hectics so wack that when he raps in the mirror
his reflection just laughs,and ask why hes here//
Okay set up with a follow through but a rather ineffective punch as an opener.
see what happens is clear,and its ok to feel threatened
because you know Ill hang you up like phones on bill collecters//
seemed a little forced for a punch, but ill give it to you. Your consistent with a set up and follow through, which is good. But the rhyme scheme shows no face here. Flow is rough as well.
see ya.......style is,what most of us would call lame
and only one word comes to mind for every punch you wrote PLAYED//
not really feeling it to be honest. The flow was completely off.
but don't be afraid,just try to find a written balance
what else can I do when I battle the mentally challenged//
error, can not compute. First line is advising him, second line as the punch your talking I. rather confusing, but concept is there.
but try to encourage him and then try not to embarrass him
then keep em off my nuts,cause this is borderline harrassment//
no bueno. Its a battle, not conflict mediation lol.
its almost sexual......thats why I can't let it slide
what you wrote was irritating,like a fat chics inner thighs//
lol, nice punch.Sexual harassment. Someones gay, but not pointing a finger, but im pretty sure you just said your almost sexually harrassing him.... so ( gay ->>> FatalX lol. ) Just playing, i see where you went with it, but set up was weak.
and if thats the best that youve got,you should find a new hobby
cause the only rap career you can get,is handing flyers out in a lobby//
lol, nice bar, prolly the best so far in all areas, except wordplay, nameflip...
your either stupid or sloppy,you should learn how to spell
don't they have spell check,for when you write on a cell//
Okay closer, went personal which was nice, but a weak punch.

Overall, my vote goes to Fatal, he not only met the criteria, but also rhymed more. iLL, meet the criteria, fix your structure and rhyme, so those wordplays will be more effective. Both need word on multies to be honest though.


MVGT FatalX

[Ill-hectic]

Cum on drunkd ths b a chat site,do i have to type exact word i mean in full? So i cn do that in round 2..n teach him a lesson

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[FatalX]

your on a cell isnt spell check automatic
lol

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[JiMMyJaM080691991]

my vote goes to fatal x no offense other guy but ur verse aint very good.