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Kause mc
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24 liner.. Worth recording?

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Ill take what you call dope n add a bit of flavour from my shelf/
N make it iller than that hydro u claim to smoke/
Remain pro in a sence, electric fence drops/
Like you cant touch it if you do prepare for a shock/
Like what? You know what im about if not/
My names kause and im here to put the south west up/
,Spit n spray writtens In a way that has you pressin play/
Bitch i made myself what i am today/
N i aint goin astray, i ride closely/
Stickin with my stallion these cats ride ponies/
Like how i met your mother huh, im ted mosby/
She loves how i rap so thats how your mother knows me/
What? And i aint talkin looks when i say im hot na/
 , n i aint talkin clubs when i say i burn bars/
, n i aint talkin talk when i speak on these beats/
, im known to walk the walk stompin on these mc's/
,take a piece of mine, delete the rhymes its still insane/
Peep the name freeze my brain so future hip hop stays the same/
,check my I.D, im as real as it gets/
Watch competition choke without no hands on there neck/
Dope lines, ever since i wrote mine, the grown broke guy/
Writing but ignored like them hobo signs/
No joke right? Take this verse as a quick spit/
Make you bounce like thats the shit up n down like chicks tits

... I dono bored outta my brains here!

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Re: 24 liner.. Worth recording?

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Yeah feelin it bro keep up the good shit & good lookin out (Real Recognize Real)RRR
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Re: 24 liner.. Worth recording?

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All good my man stay active. U can learn heaps from this site truss me

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im feelin them multis bro...deff stick out...stick with it bro
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I like your punches...they ussually hit where they need to...as far as recording this I would say you should so that you can observe the way you sound all the way around you know...when your hot and when your not...it will def help when it comes to asking whether or not you should record something also I'm sure you know but I am going to type it anyway....there are alot of hip hop heads on sites like these but you and I both know that even though we really enjoy thought out and well written lyrics the world of listeners many times dont know the difference between a dynamic verse or the simple scribbles of an idiot...also it never hurts to record and then get feed from a variety of people
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while my SPIRIT is SOLEMN//
you HEAR my WORDS in the STREETS-->
because I'm SPEAKING in VOLUMES//

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Re: 24 liner.. Worth recording?

Post by NoVeL »

Kause,

Try to sway from generic lines like
Like how i met your mother huh, im ted mosby/
She loves how i rap so thats how your mother knows me/


Everyone does that nowadays. But, your dopest line here was
Like what? You know what im about if not/
My names kause and im here to put the south west up/
,Spit n spray writtens In a way that has you pressin play/
Bitch i made myself what i am today/
N i aint goin astray, i ride closely/
Stickin with my stallion these cats ride ponies/
Shit was hot fam, keep droppin'
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Re: 24 liner.. Worth recording?

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Thanks for all the feed guys ill take wat yas said n see how i go

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