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Joel Venom - chiHEAT

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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2TkLmhZfUfA

let me know what you guys think about this,just recorded it last night..new ep on the way!
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Shit was sick with it man. U should have ur record spinnin in the club dude.
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HAHAHA @ The Rick Ross Shit. . .You Stayed On His Jock For The Hook, Not My Style. . .First Verse, You Should Watch That Delivery. . .You're Breath Control Seems Like It's Struggling. The Flow Is Smooth, But A Little Choppy Here N There. Quality Is Crisp As Usual Fam. Punches Are Nice Too. . .Really Loved That Switch You Did @ 1:53. . .I Can Tell You Did Punch Ins Like Crazy On This Track WOOOOOOOOOO "Yall Fuckin With An Animal, Call It Bestiality" HAHAHA Damn Yo, That Line Was Nice. Good Track
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thanks for checking out the track.
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You got some good beats bro.. i could spit fire on these beats.. but you go good with the beats you pick and then lyrics you got goes good, presence, delivery, energy.. the works all good bro.. keep em coming
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Was peepin this. Not a big fan of it. Ur black n yellow remix is fire tho!

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word lol,thanks for the feed.
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lol @ the rick ross line

Your flow is very consistent,unfortunately your first verse is way too long, half way through it, I was like, when you dropping the hook?

Because of your rap pattern, I would suggest doing either 12 bars or 8 bars verses then dropping your hook, rinse and repeat.

The reason I say this is that if your not a hip hop head like us on the boards, a casual listener would not appreciate some of the creativity of your bars, that's why I think you should do short verses, picking out your strongest lines from this track and throw um down your listeners ears, so they hear that fire.

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word i definitely understand what your saying.
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