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Artificial Intelligence

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BlokB Inspired.
( http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/artif ... 20354.html )
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[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KpK3sPpbM6Y[/video]

skin over my muscle tissue pressed with issues/
life Ive missed you but I'm stressed with miss use//
if use was miss strewed forgive my attempts/
a machine feels no love, but I'm filled of regrets//
so does that separate me from them? my position?/
fun's an emotion but I'm numb in its opposition//
lost in translation like a Pakistani kid/
I'm looking for a home where the devils don't live//
I give. mechanical feelings placed inline for me/
the same way life's a bitch in my dreams and chases me//
I awake in confusion the delusion being why am I fleeing?/
I'm loosing myself but the programming's already running//
I'm gunning for the door loosing the lighting/
fighting the crowds like clouds with lightning//
I'm proud but dying the sound of crying is frying/
my circuitry echoes like an eternity hurting me//
I'm sure that we, as in manufactured/
are worth more than this placard//
with backwards numbers & rebmun trap at the chest plate/
I'm immortal waiting for my check mate, a rest date//
how do I set a, clock that never ticks/
my gears rotate out of sheer habbit//
life's amazing once you've had it/
am I forever young? If I never decay//
replay/
am I uh... never young? since I forever display//
each day/
the same ensemble as expected//
you'll crumble when presented/
the world pummeled and infested//
I'll humbly unprotected/
watch you fade away... disconnected//
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I really love the instrumental man, that thing is smooth, ya delivery wasn't bad more of a spoken word type piece, which is gr8....Ya lyrics had a lot of depth and meaning to them and I was feeling the vibe. You messed up during end (just a lil choppy), but overall the piece was good man really feelin it....
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Livenlearn, I appreciate it man. I'm more of a spoke artist than a rapper, so I'm glad you noticed that. The topic was driven from a post Blokb dropped that turned into a collab within the crew(should be dropping shortly). As for the instrumental, sounds simple, but all the strings took me forever to layer, so thanks for liking it. Take it easy.
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:clap: yo thats dope homie i gotta say im feeling this i like the delivery serious man you gotta do something with your talent
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digging the spoken word vibe, and the beat was awesome for what your feel was.. kinda reminds me of some Flobots shit.. i like how it escallated through out the song good shit man
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hahaha, that's the second time I'm compared to the Flobots. Thanks for listening, and thanks for liking the beat, took me a while to play it on the piano correctly.
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love this bro. thanks for showin love too. keep it up punk. love this shit.
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It has masssive power and emotion but I was distracted by the fact that the drums never came in. It was a noble venture with just the strings and such but the drums would have given the listener a rhythm to grab. It would have took your lyrics to another level.
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Ite Fam. . .Been Awhile Since I Heard You. . .BUT, Good Shit As Always. Quality Is There. You Know I've Always Enjoyed Your Spoken Word. The Emotion And Meaning Behind The Lyrics Is Strong.

"am I forever young? If I never decay//
replay/
am I uh... never young? since I forever display//
each day/"

Idk Y, But That Part Really Caught My Attention. I Really Enjoyed The Way You Presented That. REally Good Listen, The Only Thing I'd Work On Is The Ending. A Bit Choppy. Also, When You Came Back In @ 1:04 With The "i'm Gunning" Part. Seems Like You Strait Came In Loud And Abrupt, Rather Then Smooth And Calm. . .enjoyed It Family
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Love the piano intro.. poetry is way nice man.. props for this.. Man you know how to get some stuff bumping inside bro.. this hits the spot.. just loves listening to it.. def gonna be listening to this more.. 9/10
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Thank you Deciple, the piano took me a bit to time and record right. I appreciate you taking the time to listen and giving it a 9/10.
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Post by Kuhlerblynd »

I feel that spoken word type of delivery. Especially after it picks up a little bit more into the song. Nice vocab and I like the flow. I thought it was a bit short though. Still, great work. Keep it up. One.
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First off, lyrics were incredible. You are a very skilled writer. Iunno how I felt about the song though, I thought your delivery was kind of stale and your flow could have been more smooth so that the transistion was better and it fit with the beat more. The adlibs were a little loud too. You obviously have skill though so just work on the technicalites more and you'll be good to go.
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killed it bro..love it..inspires me to get in the lab
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Post by Mic S »

this was a dope drop my dude
the way you spoke the flow through out.. was on point
went with beat perfect.. lyrics were dope
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I was digging it :violin:
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