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Re: That's Rugged Pt. 2

Post by Kau the Lion »

I think the first verse was the best of the three. Had the most punchlines that made me say, "Nice." Second verse was a bit boring but not bad over all. third verse picked it up a bit but still not as good as the first, IMO. Multies were nice and the flow stayed consistent.
Like Nevada you gonna N.V. me, I got the love like Heavy-D//
Ya got 'lie-ability', but the way I 'diss-claimers' ya be like "F-CC"//
Really liked the wordplay here.
Meaning she would travel over the ocean just to hit it//
While you running back to ya bathroom, giving the lotion another visit//
This like just made me laugh.
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Re: That's Rugged Pt. 2

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Like Nevada you gonna N.V. me, I got the love like Heavy-D//
Ya got 'lie-ability', but the way I 'diss-claimers' ya be like "F-CC"//


I'll lace ya silver spoon w/ dope so ya ass gets more thinner//
I like dirt, but I'm smart enough to wash my hands before dinner//
Blackout worse than method man, call me an avid metal fan//
No rock & roll, got a couple of arms as long as my attention span//


I'ma spray paint the food chain gold, then wear it around my neck//


Best Parts in my opinion... Good drop, a lot of Punch,wordplay, multi Etc.

1st & second outweighed the third in my opinion, but still a good piece

Keep at it
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Re: That's Rugged Pt. 2

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Nice piece. Flow was pretty much on point the whole way IMO and I really like a lot of the punches you put in here. Some real clever

Foot up ya ass, make you my "sock-puppet", now it's "Bar None"//

Nice line.

All I do is eat rappers, so no wonder shit happens//
Ha dope line!
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