hells general.

[PEPTIDE]

yo its the evil demon/
ejaculating hydrochloric semen/
cross between a twisted chieftan and an anarchistic heathen/
do you believe in, my army made of satans spawn/
that crave the dusk and hate the dawn/
armed with swords and sharpened horns/
and move in hoardes, crimson skin with jagged scars/
draped in blackened camoflauge/
screaming as they battle charge/
a sick mirage, i rule them with an iron fist/
demented type of scientist/
fighting in the silent mist/
and i insist,that amageddeon comes around/
cracks the earth and shrouds the cloud/
raise the dead from underground/
i hear a sound, an angel in the mist beckons/
so i pick up a shield and sharpen up my weapon.

[Orfadox]

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[JDR]

real short but nice vocab in this piece. Ya avy kind of creeps me out a bit bruh

[QwarterZ]

your rhymes is what really stuck out to me
got a slick use of words my dude....:shrug:
keep writing brah!

[Quix]

draped in blackened camoflauge/
screaming as they battle charge/
a sick mirage, i rule them with an iron fist/
demented type of scientist/
fighting in the silent mist/


damn ^ this flowed but yes i agree with the others a bit too short hommie!!


NICE DROP THOUGH