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Grammatical Animal

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[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SdgWmatCPkQ[/video]

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Ayo my mind can mimic an image of hieroglyphics, combined with physics
And scientific rhymes and lyrics designed in minutes
I'll realign the pyramids by Egyptians, my lines on the mic
Are liquid nitrogen it's like I'm spittin' rhythmic cryogenics
Defy the critics, who can battle me grammatically?
Tactically calculate casualties mathematically
My brain's capacity escaped reality, and is sustaining gravity
Up in the Matrix traveling a vacant galaxy
I'll maim the battle scene and challenge whoever
Balance the weather, sever atoms in half and patch 'em together
Whether I'm benevolent or malevolent is irrelevant
My intelligent mind derives from Einstein's relatives
And is evidently prevalent with an elegant, eloquent
Design to define signs before my eyes have time to develop it
A devil with black magical quotes, daggers and rope
Leap from the tabernacle and tackle you in a mask and a cloak
Then I'm havin' you choked, put down the battle-axe and grapple
While I snatch your Adam's Apple out the back of your throat
I'll poke and slash an incision, have your abdomen missin'
Ask my assistant, I'll saw you in half like a master magician
Keep actin' submissive or blow your chances of livin'
You gotta have my permission just to stand when you pissin'
I'm like a mathematician, try to pass my 'division'?
I'll kill your wife PLUS your kids and 'subtract' your fam in 'addition'
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Post by IntrinsicCadence »

Alright, once again u've come with another dope drop with killer flow. Ur ability to use multis and internal rhythm is stellar. I think I may have mentioned this in one of ur previous writtens, but I'd really like to see some piece from u that has more meaning than basically just expressing how dope u are. Its seems like ur minds fallback point is always back to yourself, so if u were to have some other kinda elevated theme and keep on topic with that theme throughout it'd show another side to ur abilities. Other than that though, this was def an enjoyable read....
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wow. multies, muties, multies...... yikes sir. i really dont feel im qualified to critique such work. so to be honest im not gonna. i will say this is pretty close to amazing, or genious, not sure wich yet but ill let you know when i figure it out. good drop Phasewon. real nice dawg.
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Much respect for the feed yall, 'preciate it.
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Post by Quix »

This whole verse had great content ... the vocab was tight. and yes your multies were nice as allways. This was another nice piece doggy! get at me for a collab fam.


Ayo my mind can mimic an image of hieroglyphics, combined with physics
And scientific rhymes and lyrics designed in minutes
I'll realign the pyramids by Egyptians, my lines on the mic
Are liquid nitrogen it's like I'm spittin' rhythmic cryogenics


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Real Recognize Real ... who dah Fuck is you???

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Re: Grammatical Animal

Post by Skunkle Sam »

The name says it all. This is dope. No criticisms. Favorite lines are the ones in between "[Phasewon]" and the next post.
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Post by Riggz »

" I'll maim the battle scene and challenge whoever
Balance the weather, sever atoms in half and patch 'em together" - nice bar. Agree with Rugged, test ya self. Go beyond the box you're currently in. A whole nother world out there that you could take on with your ability Phase.
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Post by Phasewon »

Props for the feed, I'm working on mainly lyrical verses right now until I can record, then I'll focus more on topicals and dumb the lyricism down, if you want topics peep some past shit I've done like "The Plot" or "H.A.T.E."
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Post by Glamtrash »

Well, you most certainly are grammatical lol, and your multis are killer. As a whole this is a nice iece, but it's seriously lacking deth. i'd also like to see something that stays on oint through the whole thing and look forward to reading more from you.

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Post by Haz »

This was good, strung together real well .. closing bar was a pointer 2.
gave off a eminem type of vibe. anyways good drop, keep dropping
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Em' aint NEVER spit some shit this lyrical! I appreciate the feed though, I shall return it, last time I'ma comment on this piece of shit verse by this asshole Phasewon.
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Post by JDR »

I aint read much of ya stuff so this was nice. Your vocab and the way you structure ya bars wit multies is nice. This beat is sick and I can see somethin like bein' spit at it. Wouldn't mind seeing you battle.
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