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Audible Thougt Ft.Artiztik-The Feeling

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[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8Q6K1sJpe5Q[/video]

Im on the first verse, my homie artiztik is on the second.
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Re: Audible Thougt Ft.Artiztik-The Feeling

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i like the beat had a smooth feel to it

the first verse was nice had a smooth flow and delievered quite well with good emotional lyrics bringing it, maybe could emphasised a bit more but overall good verse man

second verse was like strange cause it was like panned to the outsides, but the quality like the first verse was good, the flow maybe was the best point on this solid through the beat

overall i like the track man keep this shit comin
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Re: Audible Thougt Ft.Artiztik-The Feeling

Post by Alvin »

Cunninglynguists!!!

Well, I kind of thought the audio quality was not that great. Ill write about your verse since your boy aint here.

Your delivery and rhymes were constant, but it felt like you were on top of the beat instead of in it. I like how your voice sounded and style, showed allot of talent, but the quality again takes a huge toll on the over all opinion. Nice drop Audible, just clean the sound and you should be solid. I'd like to tell you what to fix, but i have no idea how you did it to begin with, plus past this point it may come off like an insult, which i mean not to. Keep dropping man, so i can get a feel for your audio. Love the beat by the way.
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Post by Slicka »

shit i liked the idea you put behind this kinda has a different type of feel to it so you def killed that part as far as the lyrics quality is good but its hard to hear everything your saying because of how you flowing but eitha way. good drop
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Thanks for all the feedback, i appreciate it, i know my biggest problem is the sound quality because i use a computer mic and audacity lol.

Times are hard! But i've gotten hook ups to studios as of late, so we'll see what happens
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Ite So The Quality Has Been Addressed. First Verse Was Good. Felt Emotion Through It N I Liked It. Delivery Was Good, But Watch That Breath At The Very Beginning, It Was Like NOOO Lol. Second Dude Has Better Quality, But The Panning Was A No Go. It's Heavy On The Left, And Gentle On The Right. So, Try To Even That Out. Also Had Good Emotion And Delivery, But Forgot To Delete Something. There's A Cough, Or Clearing Of Throat, Mid Chorus And I'm Not Sure If Its Intentional Or Not, But I Really Don't Think It Fits With The Song. My Suggestion Would Be To Cut It, Ya Know? Overall Though, Good Song.
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The hook wasnt really my flavor of what i like... but the verses were sick.. 1st verse, Loved how it started, you just went for it.. delivery is sick.. quality is ok, could be cleaned up a little...
2nd verse for some reason the quality seems better but it might justbe the vocals are up a little... but i like this delivery and the lyrics.. some of the pauses kinda got annoying but other then thats this is solid man..
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Re: Audible Thougt Ft.Artiztik-The Feeling

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nice vibe, i like the direct u went in it reminds me of a laidback Jedi Mind Tricks for some reason, at least the beat do. Cool shit
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