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I Shoulda Said

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This is a track that my friend wanted to do about her brother and asked me if i wanted to jump on with her.. so i did a verse about my brother...
Angie Fe - 1st and 3rd verse
Deciple - 2nd verse
Hook - both
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Re: I Shoulda Said

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Lystening and typing: Your girl is nice man, good vocals, the intro, with you supporting was pretty dope layering. Maybe putting some back up vocals on her singing would of been dope, sounds a bit empty. The chorus has a nice blend, her harmonys seem to be a tad bit up. You have a nice flow, "can I?" smooth delivery techniques. Good emotion. The last lines a lil hard to make out, but i felt your regret, so dope man. She definitly needs some back ups to make it fuller. Nice balance in her vocals though volume wise. She's out shining you my man, haha. Nah, but all in all, everythings gonna be alright. She needs back ups. Layers might be a better word. Dope track man.
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ya dude im with P.D.A, emotion runs wild in this track. i like that bout your stuff. and the topic hit me hard dude having bro problems myself. i love when an artist can touch you with a track. well done sir. Bravo.
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Yea she def. needs layers, cuz her vocals sound hollow, but with she would sound ridiculous...and if u did layer than panning needs to be better, but she's really nice...and towards end lower her vocals on those high notes, but the chorus is crazy I really love it...Your verse is coo too, the lyrics explain the concept of the song, I can feel the emotion and the rhyme structure is setup nice...Overall really nice drop, you and her shuld wrk on more stuff together, there's a nice blend there
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I Agree With PDA, The Female Vocalist Would Need Some Layers Behind Her Vocals So It Smoothens Out. She Sounds Too "Forward" With The Vocals, There's Nothing To "Fluff" Them Or Make Them Blend With The Instrumental And Please The Ear. Granted The Girl Can Sing, She Just Seems Way Too "Lonely" Through Out Her Verse, And Sumtimes In The Chorus. A Little Flat In A Section Too. . .But Watevs Lol. Hook Is Nice, I Feel Ya On It. Your Verse Had A Painful Emotional Delivery, I Hear Sorrow And Regret. Very Touching To The Listener. Good Quality, Good Delivery "Can I", I Agree That Was Nice. Good, Deep Message. I Liked. Its A Personal Track, So That's Always A Good Touch. Overall, Good Listen
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yeah she needs some layers man... shes too out there... and plain... gotta good voice but some harmonies woulda been cool.... hooks cool...

second verse was good...

third verse again... too bland... even the hook could have used some layers on her voice...

good song tho... liked the message in it... good shit man...
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I skipped right to your verse...really good verse man, I felt what you were saying. Only problem I had was it seemed like you did something weird with your mixing, I couldn't understand what you were saying and it seemed like it was muffling the end of your words. Why didn't you record in her studio? haha
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@ P.D.A
Thanks man, this was just a quick track she wanted me to jump on with her... im glad it turned out like it did. Thanks man

@blokB
Yeah i try and put emotion into all my tracks... BUt that sucks about bro probs ma.. just stick in there man, show him that better is near.. Thanks for the feed back

@Livenlearn
Yeah i see where you talking about lowering the vocals.. And her and I have a track called Windy Roads on here but we are planning on working on more.. but thanks for the time and the listen

@2xS
Yeah man, im always trying to reach my listeners.. tracks that can relate to them, I was trying to figure out what to do so her verses wouldnt sound that way even thought about jumping on myself as like "under voice" for her.. thats for the feed appreciated

@Lawgix
Yeah man, i get what you saying about the layering.. every1 has said it.. let me try it out and ill repost it back up.. thanks for the listen and glad you liked it man

@Sentus
Thanks for listening bro.. umm about the mixing.. i didnt even double back on my vocals so i dont know what it is that you cant hear.. if i get where your coming from ill try and fix it tho man... and naw man, it was my producers studio we recorded in haha... thanks again man

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All It Would take To Make Her not So Lonely Is Sum Stacked Vocals, Panned Left And Right Bro. They Always Fill Up The Emptiness
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Re: I Shoulda Said

Post by IntrinsicCadence »

I liked ur verse a lot D. Angie Fe's got a nice voice, lot of emotion in her singing style, though every once in awhile when she hits some of the high notes it's a bit too piercing.
I like the mixture of hip-hop and singing in this track, thought the verses accompanied each other well.
Lyrically, this is great, motivational and emotional, strikes some elevated themes and does them justice.
Overall, I thought this was a real nice listen. Well done...
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@2xS
Yeah man, ill definitely do that and see what it does.. with her going in so many notes and pitches its gonna be crazy...

@IntrinsicCadence
Thanks for the feed man. appreciate the honesty, well im a chrisitan rapper and i believe there is SO much more then God i can sing about and still be possitive.. Alot of christians shun me down cuz every song i do aint speaking about God.. but thats wrong in my eyes. Any thing Possitive is God, Any Love is God, God is Love... Just what i believe.. Thanks bro..
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I can do everything through him who gives me strength.

Psalms 23:4
Even though I walk through the valley of the shadow of death, I will fear no evil, for you are with me; your rod and your staff, they comfort me.
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good listen, the vibe was good and like the female vocalist, did her thing
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Thanks homie.. appreciate the feed.. up'n for more
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I can do everything through him who gives me strength.

Psalms 23:4
Even though I walk through the valley of the shadow of death, I will fear no evil, for you are with me; your rod and your staff, they comfort me.
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