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shit sorry been gone for a minute had deal wit some shit
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ive been followin your stuff man, i can feel you going forward with your flow sir. keep it up homie. maybe we jump on a track 2g soon, i need work on my delivery. i dropped some beats in the producer lounge if your interested. stay up bro
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Damn is that you on the hook, j/k....the lyrics hot, but u gotta smooth ya words out, meaning either stretch it out or shorten your rhyme structure so its fits better, and lower the dubs a lil, other than that the song is str8, your def. improving but just keep focusing on smoothing out the flow cuz some words come out a lil hesistantly
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thanx for the input its much appreciated
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Uh Oh. . .A Slow, Fuck Jam. . .I Think One Thing You Should Really Work On Is delivery. Stretch Certain Words, Shorten Some, And That'll Help You Out. LMAO @ The Whip Cream Part. . .Good Visuals, No Homo. Might Wanna Turn The Supporters Down Just A Little. Maybe 1/2 A Decibel To 2 Decibels. Overall Good Song. My Type Of Music, Cuz I Got A Whole List Dedicated Ta Fuck Songs (3+ Hours) That I'm Still Building. I Like how You mixed It From Both Fuck Music, To Love Music, If You Know What I Mean. Just Work On Delivery, A Little On Quality And You'll Get There Bro
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thanx its appreciated
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has that mainstream vibe... the advice that the other dudes gave would work but i also think if you gave it a little bit more "hype/emotion" it would just make them stretch and fit to ride the beat way better... not my taste of music but its a good track.. keep em coming homie
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