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can you replicate the noise blok makes?
if i say it once..... will you rock it eight?
while life works on great i confiscate my fate
forcing me to rake the leafs of branches that i break
im always late
arriving covered in a tempermental haze
segregating clears from greys in ways i cant explain today
youd say the same if you heard a track from Float or Labor Days
they changed my brain and might help you explain your name or game
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Short... maybe putting in a cypher woud be better. Anyhow, your lyrical abilities are developing nicely. Although it seems like you made it short because you focused on the main rhyme and stoped once you ran out. Throw some crossovers in there and u'll be set. If it was longer, it might be a good read, but something this shorts more of a tease lol.

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honestly bro i hadnt posted in a few days, it was right before bed and i wanted to drop somethin, but your indeed correct at the same time cause if it kept goin in my head ida dropped more. thanx for reading and sorry for teasing. lol
We must always and forever have hip-hops best interest at heart. We must allow ourselves to be critical of the music and culture so that ideas and beliefs that aren’t progressive can be eliminated and made unattractive to our youth. Our allegiance to Hip Hop has to be about more than romanticized ideas of misogyny, materialism, murder and mayhem. Instead our allegiances must be rooted in what we individually and collectively determine beneficial. The story of misogyny, materialism, murder and mayhem doesn’t end well. We’ve got proof. Doing what one believes is individually and collectively beneficial may allow for a better ending. Or better yet, no ending at all.
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