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Let me know what you think about this track, and whether or not the bass is overpowering on your speakers. I've listened to this on five or six different speakers or headphones, and on one set of speakers the bass sounded awful, but on all the others its sounded good. If u want some feedback on anything include a link in your post, I'll return the feed...
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intro i guess i didnt like.. kinda long.. i aint gonna lie, i was hoping for a different delivery then what you came with.. quality wise and mixing i think its all good, maybe the vocals could come up a little... the last verse is a little bit how i was hoping you would deliver it maybe without the pauses.. but this track got better.. not bad.. keep going man
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I would say I like the multi's and flow are on point. I think the delivery towards the end of your bars could come together a little better. You vocals should come up for sure. The beginning and the hook sounds kinda whiny to me, just to let you know... Maybe you could have a chick twist the hook with you, with her vocals being the background, and help that out some without having to change any of the song... Other than that, I like the track. The lyrics and message. Good job fam.


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I like what you with your verse. The lyrics were smooth which went well with the beat, good presence and emotion. I def. can relate to the topic and the lyrics conveyed the meaning well. I wasn't feeling the chorus, the harmony wasn't there and mayb like the guy above said there should be a grl on there, but overall man not bad.
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shit that intro seemd long fam lol ya lyrics is str8 i would jus say put some more umph into it but lyrically your good............good droppping
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Yo man i liked it a lot. Some real good things that I'm going to have to listen to a couple times so it marinates the right way lol. As for the bass response you were asking about, my laptop barely picked any up, so ill lysten to it through my studio and if it changes ill let you know. I do like this drop man, the strange delivery of the chorus with the not very GANGSTER RAP beat have a nice sound when you mesh them together.
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The intro would be 100% tight if you got some jill scott sounding vocals up in there. Digging the beat, and I like how the bass pumps. Decent track homie.
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You just need some better recordings, voice needs a little more power to it, which may be the power of your mic.
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Good flow over the beat, fit well wit it, nice drop
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This was fresh bro. the last verse was ridiculously hard sir!!!!!! how can i get a copy of this without dubing through sound forge, losing quality, and feeling like a thief??? nice drop!
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yeah intro was long like everyone said. i think the beat is what killed it for me. it was like a really slow beat, almost a boring beat that put me to sleep. you definitely did your thing on the beat though, had some nice lyrics. your flow could use a little more energy and emotion to it but keep doin ya thing man. holla
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long intro everyone has said yeah yeah....
the delivery needed to be more exciting but on the beat had to be difficult, the lyrics had the emotion and the feeling that got us into the song i was feeling it, you rode the beat well man, overall the song was nice man a couple of improvements here and there and this would be pretty dope no doubt
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I Hear Everyone Says Long Intro But I Think It Was Done Ok Lol. I Really Ain't Feelin The Chorus, That Is Flat And It's Just Not Pleasing To The Ear At All. Ur Quality Is Good, Maybe Approach With A Little More energy, Breath Control, Especially On The 2nd Verse Where You Took The Faster Approach. If You Can't Fit It With Your Breath, Then Do Punch Ins. If You Don't Know What Those Are, PM Me And I Can Walk You Through It. I Find They Are Very Effective, And If Done Right, Aren't Even Noticeable. Overall, Decent Listen. And BTW, The Bass Didn't Overpower My Reference Monitors, And I'm Using KRK Rokit RP5G2's So Yeah. I Also Listened Through My Bose System And It Sounded Fine Through That As Well.
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Intro was weird haha, but I liked it. The bass sounds fine to me. All your tracks are unique and this was no different. Lyrically it was pretty good, nothing exceptionally but it was enough to work for the track. Beat was a little slow but your flow on it was perfect. I wish your vocals stood out a little bit more from the beat though.

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