Spontaneous Thoughts of an Emcee

[Audible Thought]

haven't been on in a while cuz of some 'legal issues', this is the first shit i wrote in a while.

the guns drawn with sweaty palms like nam
y'all aint calm, hit the deck when i drop bombs
im on that marijuan burnin trees like napalm
i carved my name on the level you step on
i am armed with a power stronger than wea-pons
my voice and bass disintegrates your best song
to let y'all know, y'all can't fuck with the flow
its a shiver down ur spine like you stuck in the cold
im in combustible mode, every time i explode
i shatter the mold thats been trappin compassion and goals
damage the road and make my own trail no fable
go sail on the waves in audio cables
steady rockin like a cradle i deliver the meals
that ur brain eats and makes you change how you think and feel
im a real emcee no movie reels or scripts
dont praise the seal or be clumsy with the gift
i just party n shit smoke a spliff and rip the mic
cuttin down these wack rappers with a lyrical scythe
drain the spiritual life out of the pitiful dykes
i rebel against the reich like imperial knights
nobody can manage the ways i walk on the granite
like locomotive transit the panoramic view is bland
respect cats who use it as canvas with spraycan's
imagine and create we're the men without a plan

[Lyrical Gen]

This was ok. Multis were aite. There was a lot of inconsistency and some of the punches were weak:

to let y'all know, y'all can't fuck with the flow
its a shiver down ur spine like you stuck in the cold
^^^That's a good concept, but you can elaborate on that so much more and give your jab more sting

im in combustible mode, every time i explode
i shatter the mold thats been trappin compassion and goals
^^^The first line is a good setup but then the second line seems like you're rhyming well without any substance. Where's the correlation between 'compassion' and 'goals'?

Then you have more developed sections like this:
just party n shit smoke a spliff and rip the mic
cuttin down these wack rappers with a lyrical scythe
drain the spiritual life out of the pitiful dykes
i rebel against the reich like imperial knights
^^^This punchline is more thoroughly put together.....much better than the stuck in the cold line.

Overall, not bad but put some more thought into your drops and keep postin.

[The Man]

Good stuff, could use a little more creativity in the rhyming department, but it had a good flow to it, keep working.