UFO JUST LANDED leave some feed back

[UFO]

i drop scripts like a clummsy actress
pop shit like i got three asses
put out hits like a craze assasin
leavin u pricks lost like blind men in a labrynth
rap tactics considered to be baddest
so u wack faggots save the theatrics
or ur next matress will be in a casket
cuz even if u was my twin u still could nt match this
N even when im off my game ill still slaughter u lames
cuz when i come off the brain i hit with the force of a hurricane
leavin u frauds in pain 4 actin like u got game
ill even cut ur head off from ur frame 4 talkin insane
so whether ur a veteran or fucken rookie
ima go lesbian n eat u pussy s
cuz its evident aint nothin u can do to me
cuz uur words dont mean shit
like a plot in a porno movie
so u punks take heed cuz UFO 'S just landed
now watch ya run indeed like a ufo just landed

[FlipSide]

It seeems like ur flow is a lil choppy prolly cuz u took out everything not pertinent to the rhyme or message in the line... i dunno.. but it also seems like u gave ur self room to improvise if u spit this.. like add a lil here n there.. but other than that it had some funny lines in there with the metas.. i think u could do better though

[The Man]

eeeeeh, keep working.