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new song(fabulous beat remix) GIRL

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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6tveDRtH7u0

charco on chorus
slicka v1(me)
charco v2
jose v3

shit lemme know what you guys think thanx
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Re: new song(fabulous beat remix) GIRL

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The hook is ku. Catchy, and goes good with it. Dudes style fit the hook perfectly. Slick ya shit was ku also. Id jus say maybe find a better way of deliverin it. Sounds like u kinda unsure of ur lyrics alotta the times. Charko verse was prolly the smoothest one out the track. Dude had good lyrics cool delivery. Jose was dope. He has almost TOO much swag. Haha. Jus maybe coulda hit his seconds an thirds a lil more on point so the vox could be clearer. Production wasnt bad. I heard it on my phone tho so im not completely sold on the quality yet. Ill peep it in the whip an see wusup. Overall a real good track. Maybe jus get an original beat an u guys can have urself a hit. Id hit it wit a 7/10. Look forward to hearnin more tho

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Re: new song(fabulous beat remix) GIRL

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shit was cool man... hook was catchy n performed nice... mixing was cool too... first verse lyrics were nice but could have been delivered better kinda off beat at times here n there but got back on... still it was cool... second verse was good so was the third... overall nice track... if anything i'd say work on ur delivery but u do have potential man keep at it n keep em comin
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Re: new song(fabulous beat remix) GIRL

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thanks for the input ^

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