Welcome to Illest Lyrics forum established in 2005.
----
Free Vapes

New Song "Dreamer" Check It Out!

Release your best recorded material and let the world hear your talent. It doesn't matter what level you are on - you will get constructive feedback to increase your skills.

Moderator: Loon E Lou

Forum rules
Embed your soundclick video players with [soundclick]Song Id[/soundclick]. You can also just put [soundclick]Embed Code[/soundclick].

Please go back and fix as many of your old songs as you want.
Post Reply
User avatar
Livenlearn
Rhyme Master
Offline
Posts: 186
Joined: Tue Oct 19, 2010 11:22 pm

New Song "Dreamer" Check It Out!

Post by Livenlearn »

Thanks For Listening, Leave Comments, And Enjoy!

Last edited by Livenlearn on Sat Nov 13, 2010 5:28 am, edited 1 time in total.
Life Lessons Volume 1 Mixtape:

http://www.usershare.net/56nqkqtksmq6
User avatar
Jesse Knox
Rookie
Offline
Posts: 7
Joined: Fri Nov 12, 2010 5:18 am
Location: Rhode Island
Contact:

Re: New Song "Dreamer" Check It Out!

Post by Jesse Knox »

Okay, this beat is garbage in my opinion. Your flow needs work too, I hate slow flows that slow. I mean, it could work, you just need to add more to it. Lyrically it's not bad. The delivery needs work, it sounds VERY monotone. I'd say just work on the delivery and flow, it sounds like you have the lyrics part on point, but tried forcing the flow when you were writing this. Keep it up!
User avatar
Livenlearn
Rhyme Master
Offline
Posts: 186
Joined: Tue Oct 19, 2010 11:22 pm

Re: New Song "Dreamer" Check It Out!

Post by Livenlearn »

Thnx for the listen and feedback man. I'll take ya feed into consideration. Srry you didn't like beat, not sure if the song itself was your type of song, but overall monotone and flow are things independent to the song so if your noticing issues then they probably exist. So I'll try an add more life and energy to my flow, and hopefully produce a better song. It's kinda wierd hearings this response after I've heard a lot of great ones from people I don't know, but your response will be duly noted and taken into consideration. Thank you.
Life Lessons Volume 1 Mixtape:

http://www.usershare.net/56nqkqtksmq6
User avatar
Lawgix
The Aphilliated Assasin
Offline
Posts: 4214
Joined: Thu Sep 21, 2006 3:25 pm
Wins: 14
Losses: 8

Re: New Song "Dreamer" Check It Out!

Post by Lawgix »

the beats kinda ill IMO... goes hella hard... nice choice of beat... ya flow sounds really good... need to up the vocals tho... i would have turned the beat down... just a hair more... n iuno what effect u had on the chorus but i really didn't like it... thats the only honest down fall u had was on the chorus... other than that bruh it sounded nice... keep it up...
Don't Let The Game Make U, Make Urself

Lawgix

Illest Radio

Image

"Sometimes You Gotta Stand By Your Failures To Recognize Your Success" Joe Budden

pest wrote:You look Easy... Whats Good?
AntiMaTTer wrote:lmao ...is this how you hit on all the chicks?
User avatar
Chesapeake
Rookie
Offline
Posts: 17
Joined: Wed Oct 27, 2010 2:08 pm

Re: New Song "Dreamer" Check It Out!

Post by Chesapeake »

it's like a suicide watch, they can't leave me alone.. hard line

the mix on the hook came in a little cloudy with the adlib tracks.. maybe lower the singin a bit, otherwise def feeling the direction you're taking with it

a living gps.... real cool lines. cool talk tracks under your verses.
User avatar
blokB
Micless
Offline
Posts: 202
Joined: Wed Nov 17, 2010 10:50 pm
Losses: 1
Location: Sacramento, California

Re: New Song "Dreamer" Check It Out!

Post by blokB »

i like this alot. i felt the beat matched your deivery nicely. good work bro.
We must always and forever have hip-hops best interest at heart. We must allow ourselves to be critical of the music and culture so that ideas and beliefs that aren’t progressive can be eliminated and made unattractive to our youth. Our allegiance to Hip Hop has to be about more than romanticized ideas of misogyny, materialism, murder and mayhem. Instead our allegiances must be rooted in what we individually and collectively determine beneficial. The story of misogyny, materialism, murder and mayhem doesn’t end well. We’ve got proof. Doing what one believes is individually and collectively beneficial may allow for a better ending. Or better yet, no ending at all.
C.I Truth
Post Reply

Return to “The Booth”

Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users and 5 guests