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NEW* Xamine~

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Examine contaminated plans to make the planet break…
Re-animate your saddened face…
We’ve had it with this savage race
‘Mans is in a damaged place.
Freedom, never had a taste…
Feeling like this such a waste…
Get me ina madder state…
Can’t believe they bought it, thought they’d find a better way…
But the Lies lay low like an underground base…
I don’t talk what I know, I just stick it in your face…
AS im walking in the cold justa gripping onto faith

Living as I’m living loving thinking that they running…
Many waking wondering y we doing nothing..
but I’m talking bout a change. One that ppl can trust in…
All in together now, call it disgusting…
Call it corrupt yo a battle that we must win…
IM BORED OF THEIR WRONGS…
So I write about such things…
Its been so long, but they’ll never get to fuck tim…
If I disappear it’s the 5th that im up in…

Xamine and challenge the callous ones that manage…
Damn it. the planet would be different if I ran it…
no chatter of what matters just fake facts attracting panic…
I herd your cattle so stop acting like addicts.
Look outside the box. Coz We got the advantage.
I wont be stopped by no time wasting bastard
Preach about peace. Hope it reach across the atlas.
Ima take you deep. Spread a seed and make u practise..

Living as im living giving vision to imprisoned…
Now Listen coz im driven by the mission to quiz em…
dispatching facts about who really runs Britain…
What we really lack is in-tu-ition…
The education system aint promoting no wisdom
So Elervate 4 heavens sake, please follow This one
ima keep preaching till every bodies filled in…
Of course I can take it… man An alien built Tim…

Peace
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Post by IntrinsicCadence »

Welcome to Illest. This is a nice first drop ur bringing to the site here, the message is elevated, the flow has some nice multis at times, and its got some creative methods of expression. All in all, I'd say this is a real solid piece. Keep droppin' and I'll keep readin...
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i actually really enjoyed this drop yo. speaking on some real shit. the rhymes were basic at times but its all good. i was diggin the message more then anything.
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Post by Triumph »

This was a nice lil' message rap.. It was good for what it was
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Post by Kuhlerblynd »

I liked it fan. I agree that the rhyme scheme of things couldn't been tighter but overall the message was good and I like how u structured everything. Nice drop. Keep it coming man.

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Post by QwarterZ »

I thought this was pretty cool
I like how you kept the flow but segregated it when you switched it
brought a different vibe to the piece...the flow was on and off
but again it was different, which is cool, the vibe was on some concious type ish
which I enjoyed, keep writing my dude
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Post by Tim Edgar »

sound 4 ur comments.
much love.
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