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Re: Catch22- Thoughts

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man i liked the flow on this was nice, maybe just needed some more emotion but was a good track overall, i'd be happy to help you on this shit man, just pm me and i'll get on it asap
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Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Re: Catch22- Thoughts

Post by IntrinsicCadence »

Yo Catch, this is a real solid flow here. I like the lyrics a helluva lot too. Good shit. If Mutual helps u fix up ur mixing, that'll definitely give it a boost, cuz at points it can be a little difficult to hear some of the lyrics but with some better mixing I don't think that'll be so much of a problem. I appreciate how u keep the pace rather rapid, but yet have some change up in ur flow style here and there.
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Nice track, the words were drowned out by the beat at times, but of course with better mixing u'd be ok. Your rapping style is unique and I like it, but I would caution that sometimes you should slow it down just to put emphasis on a word or phrase your tryna get across in order to grasp your listener attention even more. Overall man good job, When you get a chance check out my drop at: http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/new-s ... 19146.html
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Re: Catch22- Thoughts

Post by Jesse Knox »

The beat's pretty cool, kind of annoying at the same time though. I don't think the flows the problem at all. I don't know, I'd just say it's the mixing, but once again, this computer I'm on has HORRIBLE speakers, so I don't know if I should even bother judging that. Anyways, I like this track, maybe some more emotion like stated before but it's still a cool track. Keep it up!
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well written but a lil rushed and sounds like u reading on certain parts. keep practicing though.. when you say just kidding it doesnt sound believable but i feel wachu goin for. dont quit. good message.
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Re: Catch22- Thoughts

Post by FlipSide »

Vocals Are Low... U Should Up Them Especially Since Youre Flowing So Fast... Other that the flow is real good bro... even from the lil joints u dropped before i see a huge improvement.... i think the emotion would come thru a lot better with better quality cuz at points i def felt the emotion.... its jus ur mic... up that n u good my dude
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Flow is off the hook.. Beat is simple but you could do alot to this... I think when like the organ sound came in, if you would have slowed it down that would have been sick, kinda switch up the style... but how you did it was cool.. i think making this into a track would be next objective now... that would be sick... overall im liking this man...
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