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They can Act like you're in the Best Division
Though you're just a rant Less a Vision
Understand If its ya Neck I'm Gripping
Treasure Assets, Thru ya Chest Its Shifting
Slipping ya guts through ya Digestive System
They'll escape ya stomach Like a Reckless Prison
Jack in is a Bitch Couldn't The Erection Wait?
From the Non Progressing Ape with body Sections Gaped
I Haunt U Like a Bad Bill..Ain't Learn Omegas Lesson Fake?
What a Mess U Make .. Hooking you is Like testing Bait
Rippa With T - N Tee?? Yeah Rocking a Shirt where he Reps His State..
I Thought His Writtens Were Jack Shit Now Hes a Threat In Shape ??
Saying He's a Hazard To The illest because he's Getting Hate
Dude Battles Cool But His Projects Are Poor Looking for Section 8
Eventually They'll see you ain't Rip a Soul In This Century
You Robbing illest Makes No Sense to Me When Bill Robbed You Of ya Identity
I Could bury you Kid But I Wouldn't Gain a Thang..Ya Reign was Lame
Known as a Tool who Pumps Others Up so Mechanics Frame Ya Name
Ya cage is a Phase the bitchy baby in u Needs a Decent Rattle
One Hit Wonder Like Virgin Nostrils Check Ya Recent Battles
Rippa's no ember Burst the trails more Like December turf
Less Focus On skin color lets figure out its Gender First
I Should Quit Running Shit and Just Dead My Feet ..
This Dead Guy's Streak Exists Like a Hairy Red Eye'd Beast
You get By Cheap..At That U Should Be Anti To The Fact
'Jack got K.O'D By the Cat you Said I Beat ...
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Re: Robber Down

Post by Kuhlerblynd »

I like this for the most part. Your flow was choppy at time, especially with that last bar. I liked how you had several different personals, and your punches and wordplay were really good for the most part. Some lines could have been worded a little better... Like this section of the verse...
I Thought His Writtens Were Jack Shit Now Hes a Threat In Shape ??
Saying He's a Hazard To The illest because he's Getting Hate
Dude Battles Cool But His Projects Are Poor Looking for Section 8
Eventually They'll see you ain't Rip a Soul In This Century
But overall, I respect this alot. You're the only person to retort at him too...
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Post by Orfadox »

enjoyed reading this alot had some really good lines liked the bill robbing his identity line the most

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Nice Haz. Havent read anything by U in awhile.

Flow was a bit hard to get. But I found it!

Nice topic. Some good multies.
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