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under the dirt the grass is my blanket
one with the earth..split amongst people
never to promise changes ,change is due
though respect is in love with evil
the youths reflection states Pain is true
I wait to soak up what will help me rise
I never move during the days or nights
just a poor situation in front of wealthy eyes
sit still to look for god I pray for sight
i'll make it through cause he won't tell me lies
imagine sitting with no clue of life
To forever agree with the cycle which has you tied
but things are unfair and what I love just goes
I hope my will powers rises up for growth
I will grow, minus physically thats my boat
yet a paddle would get stuck in this land
I'm delivering emotion.. this is pure heart
I won't pass with a stroke.. Do I have a heart?
all I see are roots with no choices involved
gripped so firm hear echoes with no voices involved
i'll remain a rebel because I fiend to grow
spiritually till my present is my dream evolved
looked down on covered in chains of the outsider
can't run,can't strike, can't explore the world
If God doesn't make mother cry I just Lay out dry
to soak in nothing.. which left me in sad need
I won't do this... I wish I had feet, I had wings
I had teeth, I had things, I had thumbs I had gums
But I don't isn't that beat? I refuse to grow
i'll just sit you fucking pricks'll hear sad shrieks
If I had guts they'd be chewed during a Mass feast
i'll never be one the word Glad feeds..
Under the dirt to forever hold my role as the Bad Seed
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Post by IntrinsicCadence »

Damn Haz, this is a stellar piece, my favorite among what I've read from you. I appreciate the extended metaphor that u never fall off from. And u do a really good job of relating the metaphor to life. I also like reading some diversity in your writing styles, I've read a lot of battle piece and other diss writtens, but this is the first more poetic drop I've read of yours. It feels like poetry, but the kinda poetry that could easily be dropped to a beat and made into a nice track. I think my favorite line is this one:
i'll remain a rebel because I fiend to grow
spiritually till my present is my dream evolved
But you got all sorts of potential quotables in there. Good on you.. Stay up...
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Yea man this was a good read.. i noticed how u used the different rhymeschemes in the beggining but u dropped off and went to the ole rhymescheme... it was dope and i had to read the first few lines more than once to catch the flow..good message involved. Nice drop.. People need to up the distilled section and get this popping.
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