My Vacation (updated the music)

[songsfrmtheleft]

Update: sorry words don't match song.

Written to DawsDiesel Productions "Get Away"

I asked them to go back where they come from
It was futile, I need a new style at least that's what they told me
But I did what I do best, and laid down to rest like "they aint talking like they know me"
And...if they are, I become the villain
It's open season out here, man fuck concealing
I aint concentrated on it
It's irrelevant to what I'm trying to do
I'm just working to get better, cuz I feel like the stomach flu
Like...no matter where you go you feel me
And I'll change your mood in an instant
This could be yo jam for your sub-12's
Bass kicking at the start of every sentence
Forgive me, for urgency in which I write this
I'm being led to walk the plank
By these friends that all sudden decided to be pirates
So now when I pull it off I have no one to thank
What a shame, let’s not play the blame game

If so I can't hardly wait until I win, just watch
You want crazy I'll pull out the Dennis the menace slingshot
Ok I'm assaulting this I confess it sounds forced
Beat screaming something crazy I say it's been coerced
Ummm...did I take it too far
Did I let my pride get in the way, screw scar
Overextended, I need a ruler to help me reach further I don't know where to end it

[IntrinsicCadence]

I feel this is a good rough draft for somethin that could be real nice. You got some good concepts intertwined within it, I think they just need a bit more focus in order to be strengthened and brought out a bit more...

[songsfrmtheleft]

Thanks for the input!