feedback cypher

[IntrinsicCadence]

Nice rhythm and flow on there Q, feels like there's some natural pauses that would make it a good audio freestyle. Concepts are alright, nothing to jump up and down about, but not a bad quick freestyle...
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My inspiration to freestyle in wild styles
always seems to strike when I cannot write
and meanwhile my time flies away 'till it's too late.
Flapping it's wings, it's leaves from these trees,
and soars towards these phrases my verbal sword swings.
Cuz responsibility begins to creep into my vision
until I realize I gotta lot shit to do to keep this pot I piss in
and I'mma need to wake up early to be on my daily hustle's wisdom.
So why I keep lettin' my mind strive to express these lines
until the wee hours way beyond when I should be open eyed.
Cuz it's like, even if exhaustion enwraps around my mind,
as soon as inspiration strikes this lingering tiredness fades, but why?
I'd contemplate this, but I gotta go float weightless in my dreams bout to arrive...
So buh-bye...