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Put In Their Place (Unfinished)

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yeah its tj, spittin about those who have to fight in doubles,
coz they cant fight for themself, they cant handle their own troubles,
i make you feel like your facin suttin thats real collosal,
leave ya dead, in the end, youll get digged up like a fossil,
without cheats, i drop beats, down the bristol streets,
killin everyone who cant keep up with this, cant take the heat,
my lyrics are the kind that make you and your boys feel ill,
its like im holdin a gun, i get the one shot kill,
your barz are ridiculous, the way im spittins malicious,
this spit'll knock ya down a few pegs, if your ambitious,
spittin like me, man your wishin for the impossible,
aint gunna be responible, if you fall over obstacles,
your gettin jealous coz i know how to spit my barz fast,
if this was a movie, right now i'd be merkin the whole cast,
coz none of those amateurs know how to rise to my level,
all wishin they had the skill, but theyre juss wannabe rebels,
try to spit at us, then watch as you get scrubbed,
your spits are so shit, no one bothers to have them dubbed,
i hate those pussy rappers that dunno how to be consistant,
and have to either keep their distance, or have a fightin assistant,
they aint men, they cant fight their own battles, there juss pathetic,
even if their related genetic, they better not make me go skeptic,
you cant even take advice, you juss call it manipulation,
because you cant face the facts that you cant fill no expectations,
i cant be controlled, im always here juss spittin like a mad man,
but im sick of all those sad mans, that try to act like bad mans,
the ones with shit tracks, that make me wanna listen to opera,
coz theyre so shit, spittin bout lies like gettin put in a cop car,
do what i do, spit bout real shit, like bein resented,
instead makin your shitty little tracks and soundin demented,
or juss leave it, carry on hangin round with people full of vanity,
coz in the end, your gunna be on your own losing sanity,
your findin hard to handle me? yeah man thats expected,
you need to learn to spit your barz before you'll be respected,
on the subject of respect, thats what you wanna be earnin,
i mean your pretty unexperienced, i guess your still learnin,
you could be good in time admittedly, but you need to be smart politically,
coz i say this really literally, i dont do it in no soliliquiy,
i juss spit my barz, coz in the end ill be earnin myself dollars,
once you learnt you arent meant to follow, make sure you give me a holla,
its juss at the moment you look pathetic, and we got the advantage,
coz you cant stick up for yourself, you juss get left in a bandage,
and when i die, i aint gunna leave you nuthin to inherit,
i aint gunna leave you presents or put money on ya debit,
but i doubt ill die anyway, im basically indestructable,
but they take you down easy, all they gotta do is distract the fool,
but the thing about me, is i take my barz seriously,
and i aint makin this track to cause a big conspiracy,
im juss writin this because spittin is becomin contagious,
and i listen your shitty tracks and think theyre outrageous,
your juss tryna be sadistic, while im sat bein artistic,
and your boys better not fuck with us and make me go ballistic,


i dunno whether to carry on writin this or not?
let me know what you think :)
Dear Daddy
[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QZ7m0_uYms4[/video]
Love Letter Pt. 1 (Fallin In Love)
[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=F4oNHR84tqo[/video]
Love Letter Pt. 3 (Whatcha Say)
[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DZiA-Mpt2EE[/video]

im slaughterin stale, competition, i got the whole block wishin, they could run with my division but they gone fishin, with no bait, kid ya boy hold weight, i got my soul straight, ill wash ya mouth like colgate.
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Re: Put In Their Place (Unfinished)

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This was cool. Some filler here and there, but the vocab was nice and I noticed some multis. Try to always put meaning in every line and keep writing for the sake of a rhyme to a minimal. Punchlines are always essential in drops like this too and u had some fairly simple ones in here. Overall I'd say u had good potential and ur on the right track.
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Re: Put In Their Place (Unfinished)

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cheers mate :)
do you think i should carry on writin this?
Dear Daddy
[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QZ7m0_uYms4[/video]
Love Letter Pt. 1 (Fallin In Love)
[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=F4oNHR84tqo[/video]
Love Letter Pt. 3 (Whatcha Say)
[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DZiA-Mpt2EE[/video]

im slaughterin stale, competition, i got the whole block wishin, they could run with my division but they gone fishin, with no bait, kid ya boy hold weight, i got my soul straight, ill wash ya mouth like colgate.
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Re: Put In Their Place (Unfinished)

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Yeah man.
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Re: Put In Their Place (Unfinished)

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okay bud, ill post it on here once im finished :)h
Dear Daddy
[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QZ7m0_uYms4[/video]
Love Letter Pt. 1 (Fallin In Love)
[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=F4oNHR84tqo[/video]
Love Letter Pt. 3 (Whatcha Say)
[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DZiA-Mpt2EE[/video]

im slaughterin stale, competition, i got the whole block wishin, they could run with my division but they gone fishin, with no bait, kid ya boy hold weight, i got my soul straight, ill wash ya mouth like colgate.
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