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Re: So... Cold...

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Dreadful... haha I'm only playing but throughout it kept that whole feeling; dread. With a lot of cynicism executed smoothly through your simile heavy style of writing. I personally liked the second verse the best, it really stood out above the rest.

The re-working of the Guns n Roses song was different, do you plan on recording this?
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I'm kind of getting tired of reading about all your problems with women.

But the allusions, metaphors, and similes keep it fresh.

I think you did overdo the cold lines. You must have a low body temperature. Maybe its cold where you're located.

Favorite Lines.

"I never wanted a mistress, so no wonder my ass don't miss-stress//"

"Wounds from the misses claws, leaving me in the cold snow//
But fuck that hoe, I'm on top of the world, NORTH POLE!//"

Favorite Verse

The second one clearly.
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I Read This Already And Just Had To Stop In Here And Say That This Was Well Written. Def Kept Me Interested Thru Out The Whole Thing. Good Use Of Metas, Word Play And Ect. Had Some Quotables In There Tho i Have No Time Right Now To Look N Find Them...... This One Of The Better Written Pieces Ive Seen. Dopeness
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Mad rap, been thru somethin similar before so feelin it heaps loco...its a shame u don't put this on audio as a rap remake using tha gunners beat to tha song....
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Re: So... Cold...

Post by 1 !LL B!tch »

This WAS well written and I liked it, lyrically, but you make it ssem like you turning homo or something, all this degrading of the best fucking being on the planet is stupid boy! We made you, if we abort you men kids then what, world will come to an end, oh you are so wrong for this song/drop. Lucky I like your ability to rap or I would B!tch slap you! lol
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