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Its me

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Deep thoughts while i lay is wat im fightin,
full of secrets like rite now im fallin asleep while im ritin,
Deres many things i neva say while simply composing,
Its not wat i wanna rite..its wat has already been chosen,
My ryhmes are wat sooths me its like im in meditation,
As soon as da pen touches da paper its an earthquake feel da vibration,
Da verses leave curses you'd sware i was hatian,
B4 i kill lyrically u hearr shh shh now hear cums jason,
wats amazing, of all temptation, is concentration, ur placen,ur soul in condemnation, persuation is wat i use as tool to conquer all,
I wont make u jump off da bridge ull wanna trip and fall,
Man *yawn...wat is goin on?,
Just woke up and i see lyrics to a song?,
My inner me mustve seemed to have found a way to communicate,
i want..no..i cant...wat the hell?! hand just wait!,
Get a hold of urself i dont wanna rite,y movin man wea r u goin?
"da world needs to kno dat its you and me BIGGIE inside of u flowin "....

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Nice drop. This, as well as another piece or two you've dropped I've liked a lot, while a few others I didn't like at all. It seems to me like when you focus and build on some kinda concept you gotta a lot of talent. Just keep the focus and keep buildin'...
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solid drop man, flow was pretty consistent. try not to use words like "dis" just use the proper word "this". it just makes it easier to follow IMO. keep doin ya thing man.
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Re: Its me

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My inner me mustve seemed to have found a way to communicate,
i want..no..i cant...wat the hell?! hand just wait!,
Get a hold of urself i dont wanna rite,y movin man wea r u goin?
"da world needs to kno dat its you and me BIGGIE inside of u flowin "....
I Think This A Descent Deep Drop.. Nice Lil Topic Here. I Think You Could Have Done more With The Idea Though.. It Seems Kinda Short to me. Nice Imagination and creativity though
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