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pablo1212
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-You know that im better than , all these other veterans/
-Never have I lost cause never do I let em' win/
-If yu talkin W's , all I do is get them in/
-I gather them up & then stack them up like benjamins/
-Im always on my grind , so im getting all these checks again/
-Im caken it like bakers , chasen paper like a mexican/
-I usually throw money in the air just for the heck of it/
-My treasure box is full but your bank account is negative/
-Funny guys always joke around but they aint much to me/
-Money wise there parallel to me, they aint touching me/
-Im clutching G's , I can feel the jelousy/
-Effort brings me pain , but the money is my remedy/

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i like the flow in this verse and da similies u use aswell..."-Im always on my grind , so im getting all these checks again
Im caken it like bakers , chasen paper like a mexican"...freshhh..stay up my dude...
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This was pretty cute...nice drop girl
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"..............lulz

this isnt elementary nukka"

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Flow was cool and a couple good concepts I noticed, but your wordplay is something you need to work on, and your delivery just isnt really hitting hard IMO. I think everything else is pretty nice and I like how you structured your lines out. Keep dropping fam.
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Thanks , I appreciate the feedback .

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