Orfadox Vs Evolution (Topical)

[Orfadox]

Topic:The Pleasures Of Heartbreak
Deadline:Say Sunday Give Us Sometime To Work On It Then
Lines:16/24
5 Votes Wins
3-0 K.O

[Ambiguous Realm]

sounds good, i'll start it tonight

[Orfadox]

Il Get Dropping Mine Tomorrow That Alright?

[Ambiguous Realm]

sounds good, i just started right now, i'll either have it dropped a little bit later or tomorrow as well

-- Fri Sep 17, 2010 10:29 pm --

alright lol done, thought i'd take longer to key this but fuck it..

When your single you can be a whole,
become so undefeatable you can free ya soul
these people know, to break hearts is to be alone,
and for the first time it's peace at home,

no worries about those who need control,
you'll really see what's beautiful when you leave the foe,
believe it so you can finally reach your goal,
we need that pain so we can breathe and grow,

we hurt n forsake then we learn from mistakes,
at first heartbreak we burn on the stake,
and the terms that we make turn from the ache,
but in the end it's all good and we determine our fate,

we see our regrets and run from the past,
till we find a new love to tumble and crash,
our heart's break and crumble like glass,
the pleasure is an aftermath, but none of it lasts,

[repteelay]

no worries about those who need control,
you'll really see what's beautiful when you leave the foe,
believe it so you can finally reach your goal,
we need that pain so we can breathe and grow..

sick bar nice

[Ambiguous Realm]

^ appreciate the compliment

[Orfadox]

My verse is written but having problems getting on the net and dont really want to drop it using my phone so if you could wait until tomorrow mine will be up then

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[Ambiguous Realm]

yea man it's no problem, whenever you get pc access try and edit it into your post above mine so that the verses aren't too far apart with all this excess posting

[Kuhlerblynd]

Orfadox is having problems posting his verse, so Im going to drop it for him. Hope this isnt a problem...

Feel her beauty near astounded when her ugly side rears
hide the tears the viscious words i choose not to hear
embrace the freedom pack up my bags and go im leaving
keep on walking until footsteps is the only thing im hearing
the rain heavy as i try to accept all if this heartache
confined in space these are the real pleasures of heartbreak
realise now that its not too late to decide my own fate
can stay the same change the blame or realise this is joy not hate
So i guess now its time to experience the ugly side of love
my subconcious confused feeling things no man ever should
am i in love or am i happy that im finally free
searching for the light cos right now i cant see
so i spread these wings fly high and let the happiness begin
easier said then done cos now the cycle starts again i just cant win
so i guess its a case of same shit just different toilet
so we accept our fate to the fact that we cant avoid it

[AntiMaTTer]

When your single you can be a whole,
become so undefeatable you can free ya soul
these people know, to break hearts is to be alone,
and for the first time it's peace at home,
sick, nice multi usage incorporating good imagery


no worries about those who need control,
you'll really see what's beautiful when you leave the foe,
believe it so you can finally reach your goal,
we need that pain so we can breathe and grow,
this sounds like something id do for a topic like this to be honest, i like it its got good multi usage and even though "heart break" sucks youre still managing to bring the light to the darkness

we hurt n forsake then we learn from mistakes,
at first heartbreak we burn on the stake,
and the terms that we make turn from the ache,
but in the end it's all good and we determine our fate,
my fav lines so far, this has meaning behind it

we see our regrets and run from the past,
till we find a new love to tumble and crash,
our heart's break and crumble like glass,
the pleasure is an aftermath, but none of it lasts,
lol nice, this was an awesome piece RE, nice drop dude

-- Mon Sep 20, 2010 5:22 am --

Feel her beauty near astounded when her ugly side rears
hide the tears the viscious words i choose not to hear
embrace the freedom pack up my bags and go im leaving
keep on walking until footsteps is the only thing im hearing
nice imagery, good visual aspects incorporated with a decent flow

the rain heavy as i try to accept all if this heartache
confined in space these are the real pleasures of heartbreak
realise now that its not too late to decide my own fate
can stay the same change the blame or realise this is joy not hate
this was pretty nice but i was liking the first 4 more,

So i guess now its time to experience the ugly side of love
my subconcious confused feeling things no man ever should
am i in love or am i happy that im finally free
searching for the light cos right now i cant see
i liked this though, the last two lines stuck out most.

so i spread these wings fly high and let the happiness begin
easier said then done cos now the cycle starts again i just cant win
so i guess its a case of same shit just different toilet
so we accept our fate to the fact that we cant avoid it
nice closer too, this was a good piece over all


Im not sure how you guys base topics off of but ima do it like this:

Imagery-RE *his imagery was pretty vivid and helpd picture the verse
Flow/Multis-RE *his verse had good use of multis which helps the flow*
Story Telling- TIE *both did really well at this*
Stayed on Topic-TIE *both went about it differently but both did it nicely*

VOTE- RE


Glad i took the time out to peep this, makes me wana hop in a topical battle.

Good drop from the both of you

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[Ambiguous Realm]

RE? lol, im not rugged man, thx for taking the time out to vote though, and no problem with orfadox having u post his verse murk

[AntiMaTTer]

LMFAO!


I was wondering if anyone would notice


lmfaooo Yea i meant EVOLUTION im justplaying

[IntrinsicCadence]

This is a tough one to vote on, both are real ill, so to make it easier for the vote, I'mma break it down into the same categories as Anti did. Let me just say, both these verses were real nice, good battle fellas:

Imagery- Orfadox
(I could picture a lot of images within his words, it was real poetic. Evo's has a couple pieces of nice imagery to, but imagery wise goes to Orf)

Flow- Evolution (Evo's flow was real consistent, never lost the rhythm and I could feel the beat pumping through it. Orf has a pretty good flow too, but it fell off a couple times and certain words like 'leaving' and 'hearing' seemed like they were supposed to rhyme but don't really)

Storytelling- Orfadox (Orf's piece seems more like something someone would write after a breakup, made for a more true kinda feel to the atmosphere about it. Evo's felt more like a general expression of what a break-up is like, but didn't really convey so much of a story atmosphere per se. I guess Orf's words seemed closer to the subject, while Evo's kinda seemed to be observing from afar, if u know what i mean.)

Stayed on topic- Tie (neither flow ever fell off topic, and both built on themselves well)

Overall--- Orfadox (This was a hard one for me to vote on, as they were both quite ill, but I think the more poetic feel and strong vocab just made Orf edge out Evo's tight flow by a bit)

[Orfadox]

Aiight 1-1

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[TheNobleOne]

i would have to give this one to EVOLUTION

i feel he really hit the topic on the head with the way he explained the "pleasures" of heartache. almost like he was imprisoned the entire time until the heartbreak happened and he talked about how he could finally be free and do things he couldnt do before. to me thats what every man feels like sometimes in a relationship. i just connected with his piece a little more then orfadox. orfadox did a pretty good job but just wasnt into the message as much. good battle for the both of you but i gave the edge to EVO.