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Nice Guys Finish Last...

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Nice Guys Finish Last...

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She's into that "Asshole" type
You know the guy that forgets her birthday and that special song that she likes
She's like "He's Perfect and we'll be together forever"
Yet forever is only till he finds somebody better
See i peeked her eyes and met perfection
Meanwhile he looked and cought his own reflexion of the holes in himself
And the imperfections of all the "hoe's" he left placed on shelf's...



Thought some of you would enjoy this...sorry i havn't posted much been kinda busy but im back now soo lets get this shit rollin haha
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WOW!!!!...so much feed, thanks!...fuckers
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Nice Fa a Short Thing .. lol Spit The Truth
I Like That Feelin Felt
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Thanks
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Post by 8th »

good stuff man. you should make your poems longer, cause there really good.

See i peeked her eyes and met perfection
Meanwhile he looked and cought his own reflexion of the holes in himself

^favorite line.

it was good, and true. But really man, you should make these longer, and get more in depth. good stuff though man, keep dropin. and ill keep leavin feed.
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Thank You...im working on one thats alot longer haha you should enjoy it
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Short & Sweet Fam ..
i Loved Tha Rhymin` On This ..
it`s So Real too ..
Gurls Be Wantin` Them Thugs Now-a-Days ..
Lol ..
Them Dudes That`ll Smack Her around a Few Times ..
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.. it`s S.a.W Bitches ..
.. Niggas ain't Fuckin Wit Tha Team ..

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Post by Borat »

^ Truth...thanks for the feedback...i will return the favor
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Post by ReFleXiOn »

seems a tad simplistic, very short, yet you did deliver the message you intended, overall kinda subpar, however, poetry is what you feel, not how others feel about it. nice read...1
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co-sign not a bad piece at all family!
Real Recognize Real ... who dah Fuck is you???

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Coulda been a whole lot longer. I love reading your shit and so this was a disappointment lol. Fairly overplayed but decent message as well.

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holy shit.. I wrote this sooo long ago... forgot it was here.
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