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South Boss- Excerpt

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Produced by June B. "Boss Southern"

These chicks always cut me, then keep running.
I smile, they never stop, always keep it coming.
They want me to lie there, but I just keep on roaming.
Energizing ladies, I keep on going.
Ummm...I keep on flowing....even after hours
You hear my water running, that's not the shower.
And I devour...any wack dude
They thought I was kidding until I fucking smacked dude
He had an attitude...so I slapped dude
He was lightweight, turned him into snack food.

All this happened with they jaws wide open
Gawking at my actions, opinions were soft-spoken.
So I walked it out...then hawked out.
I'm fly people...boss out.
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Re: South Boss- Excerpt

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Ok Bro The Flow Was At Best Elementary...Im Not A Fan Of The
And I devour...any wack dude
They thought I was kidding until I fucking smacked dude
He had an attitude...so I slapped dude
Rhyming dude with dude...is jus wayyy too easy... couldve switched it up and challenged your self to be a lil more creative... i cannot listen to the audio cuz it keeps buffering so i cant comment on the effect the delivery would have. id say read some of whats written in this sections and get familiar with the use of multies and metaphores so that u can elevate to a better position...it will help ur recording as well... Uno!
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