One Way Road (Or Not?)

[QwarterZ]

Established in a state of subconcious
I cannot confront nonsense, my loves lost
it's twirled in the sky as its undone
thoughtless streams of tears flow frequently
I try to tune into you with a low frequency
I go through sequences of dreams unevenly
stuck in a state of no help or self control
left my self alone dealing with pain...
a state of loss and everything else fell...
behold
your emergence alone could save me from this
feels like I'm done with society I succumb quick
one hit alone could get me higher...but...nothin'
will get me back to the same position again
listen to friends and exclude the thing that made me
the one person that could save me and probably take me
I try to snap out of it safely, but I can't
I escape from safety and into danger, still intact
the ceiling collapses, and I'm stuck between falling
or falling...debris, you see, the blow won't be softened
nor the feeling be excavated, it depends on you
you alone could rebuild this whole sense anew
but I'm silent, steppin' through to the next stage
knowing that looking back really isn't the best way
but my world is falling apart around me every second
I'm calling out to a world I only see from this perspective
a last sign of knowledge, I can't hear anything...alone
eventually you might make your whole presence be known....God

[complexity]

Established in a state of subconcious
I cannot confront nonsense, my loves lost
it's twirled in the sky as its undone
thoughtless streams of tears flow frequently
I try to tune into you with a low frequency
I go through sequences of dreams unevenly

[Nice imagery]

stuck in a state of no help or self control
left my self alone dealing with pain...
a state of loss and everything else fell...
behold
your emergence alone could save me from this
feels like I'm done with society I succumb quick
one hit alone could get me higher...but...nothin'
will get me back to the same position again
listen to friends and exclude the thing that made me
the one person that could save me and probably take me
I try to snap out of it safely, but I can't
I escape from safety and into danger, still intact
the ceiling collapses, and I'm stuck between falling
or falling...debris, you see, the blow won't be softened
nor the feeling be excavated, it depends on you
you alone could rebuild this whole sense anew
but I'm silent, steppin' through to the next stage
knowing that looking back really isn't the best way

[Very nice line there]

but my world is falling apart around me every second
I'm calling out to a world I only see from this perspective
a last sign of knowledge, I can't hear anything...alone
eventually you might make your whole presence be known....God

Good closer. I felt this piece was a rollercoaster of emotions and intricate thoughts were present and abundant.

What I didn't like was the lack of clear wordplay that makes you stop and think that was amazing. Not enough eye popping lines, surely a consistent walkthrough into your psyche.