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Flawless Rawness

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[Phasewon]
My lyrical skill is a miracle, still the imperial
Serial killer, with ill material to instill the fear in you
Fill your burial plot, compare me to shock, therapy
Thought yall was prepared for me, but apparently not
So many subliminal shots, killin' your heart quicker
Than hard liquor, fillin' a glock bigger than Godzilla
I'm still the only make and model, rapper that'll break a bottle
Off your dome then throw your body in a lake tomorrow
Follow the protocol, when you go to war
Thugs, killers, drug dealers, I know 'em all
Don't throw the ball if you don't wanna play the game with us
I came to crush your frame to dust, when the flamer bust
I'm dangerous, the gauge’ll just, turn your brain to mush
Blow your casket, and smoke the ashes, like it's angel dust
Your label’s fucked! When I drown it with gasoline, then flick a
Caraseen match, at your buildin' and watch the flames combust
I hate your guts; so I'm willin' to spill 'em
Killin' your children, and seal your cavity fillin's and drill 'em
Until your face is numb, then lace you up with razor cuts
Til you in emergency surgery gettin' stapled shut
With your navel tucked, and your nasal stuffed with gauze
I'm above the law, I make the fuzz, shit in they fuckin' drawers
Fuck 'em all, I'll buck 'em all, break the cuffs
Rush his door, rape his slut, crush her jaw, snuff the whore
Tape her up, I'll make your grandma hug the floor
Tied to a harness, to pry her apart with, like tug of war;
I'm dyin' to start shit, I'll grab a lighter and spark it
And have the fire department outlinin' your carcass, like an underscore
Leaving nothin' more, than the roof on your house
Snatch your son out his crib, and smack the tooth out his mouth
I doubt he's even teethin, I don't even need a reason
When I leave him bleedin' this evenin', so I'ma seep his breathin'
I'm squeezin off the trigger, and I'm not releasin'
Til your leavin' in a bigger coffin than Notorious B.I.G.'s is
The evil genius, I been receivin’ pieces of demon speeches
That translate, when I speak in English
So plead to Jesus, or the Dalai Lama
Meet me on the battle field, you'll need a bat 'n shield, with body armor
You wanna battle still? You aint half as ill
I'm turnin’ rookies, into burnin’ pussies, with no Vagisil
Witness mass appeal, and I don't even have a deal
Plot and you out, get popped in the mouth, like aspirin pills
You catchin' chills, when I body rappers, when the shotty blast ya
It'll probly jack ya life like body snatchers
You got me backwards, tryin' to test my threshold
I'll throw you in a neck hold, and watch your whole head ex-plode
Get sewed up, and leave your temple leakin', while your
Neck is swingin', off your shoulders like a bell, when the echo's ringin'
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Re: Flawless Rawness

Post by RainMan »

arrgh i wanna say this is another amazing drop from you 10/10

But i cant.

This just seems very mediocre to me.
The metaphores are very overused and the rhymes are so simple and i dont know about anyone else but i felt like the flow was quite choppy.

id have to say its a 7/10

You can do better
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Post by MesaR »

I thought this was dope as fuck multis were good and the punchlines and whole style appealed to me, one of the better thing's ive checked out recently
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Re: Flawless Rawness

Post by NoVeL »

arrgh i wanna say this is another amazing drop from you 10/10

But i cant.

This just seems very mediocre to me.
The metaphores are very overused and the rhymes are so simple and i dont know about anyone else but i felt like the flow was quite choppy.
Blow Dick Man, His Shit Was HOT!!

Worth Tha Read Phasewon You Hungry As Fuck. I Hope You Catch A Deal Soon My Nigga, Lend Me Ya Pen Skills For A Minute.

Caught My Interest Here..
Don't throw the ball if you don't wanna play the game with us
I came to crush your frame to dust, when the flamer bust
I'm dangerous, the gauge’ll just, turn your brain to mush
Blow your casket, and smoke the ashes, like it's angel dust
Your label’s fucked! When I drown it with gasoline, then flick a
Caraseen match, at your buildin' and watch the flames combust
I hate your guts; so I'm willin' to spill 'em
Killin' your children, and seal your cavity fillin's and drill 'em
Until your face is numb, then lace you up with razor cuts
Til you in emergency surgery gettin' stapled shut
With your navel tucked, and your nasal stuffed with gauze
I'm above the law, I make the fuzz, shit in they fuckin' drawers
Fuck 'em all, I'll buck 'em all, break the cuffs
Rush his door, rape his slut, crush her jaw, snuff the whore
Tape her up, I'll make your grandma hug the floor
Tied to a harness, to pry her apart with, like tug of war;
And Here...
Meet me on the battle field, you'll need a bat 'n shield, with body armor
You wanna battle still? You aint half as ill
I'm turnin’ rookies, into burnin’ pussies, with no Vagisil
Witness mass appeal, and I don't even have a deal
Plot and you out, get popped in the mouth, like aspirin pills
You catchin' chills
Though There's Some Truth Your Flow Got Choppy To The End Considering Overall I'd Give It 9.5/10 & That's Fuckin' Awesome Cuz I Felt The Emotion. Keep em Comin' Dude!
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Re: Flawless Rawness

Post by AbZ The Beast »

I'm still the only make and model, rapper that'll break a bottle
Off your dome then throw your body in a lake tomorrow
hahaha thats dope
I hate your guts; so I'm willin' to spill 'em
Killin' your children, and seal your cavity fillin's and drill 'em
Until your face is numb, then lace you up with razor cuts
Til you in emergency surgery gettin' stapled shut
brutal... i love it
Plot and you out, get popped in the mouth, like aspirin pills
nice

very dope drop
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Re: Flawless Rawness

Post by complexity »

Ill as fuck.

But how about you prove your authenticity and collab with some people on this site.
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Re: Flawless Rawness

Post by werd »

dope
however it sounds like some repackaged Em a lil
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Re: Flawless Rawness

Post by complexity »

werd wrote:dope
however it sounds like some repackaged Em a lil
Em never wrote that clean.

And many would claim that Em was a repackaged Cage, etc.
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Re: Flawless Rawness

Post by QwarterZ »

This was some slick shit man, the flow was impeccable
the vibe was sick....you gotta record it if anything
it doesn't come off as a text piece, it needs to be heard
keep writing tho' brah
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