The Rhythm of the Rise

[IntrinsicCadence]

(0:12) Welcome to the rhyme realm
where the rhythm of the rise dwells
and the vision of your mind swells
as your inner heaven overcomes internal hell.
(0:25)
This song, it circles round the center of my soul,
seekin' for the beacon that'll lead me home.
I've been searchin' high and low
for the path paved, not with gold,
but with goals to attain to a higher plane.(0:38)
Hold onto this frame,
never let it fade away.
Let us pray that the weather will abate
and the vain aims of today will give way
to a higher kind a' faith
that inspires us to raise the banner of a new day...
(0:50)
We are the dawn-breakers blazin' trails like the rays.
We are the ancestors of the future's generations,
and we're facin' struggles, not just basic troubles.
This estrangement of brothers world-wide
has caged us in bubbles, separatin' us to sides.
But we can change this with our faith as our guide,
we can overcome the chasms that divide
if we strive for equality and unity, it will come to be the fruit of our time....
Equality and unity...
Equality and unity...
(1:28)
This is what it's all about,
Clearin' out the clouds of doubt,
Mirrorin' the radiance within our sounds
of a hallowed rhythm rising from the ground
to a realm where your mind climbs to find a higher Will,
and to seek for what is real,
and to build heaven and to break hell.
What tales can we tell to portray more than the self?
We've forsaken the sacred, (and) complacently dwell
in this place where we're destined to fade from, this shell,
some call hell, some call life, some live well, some with strife,
some will fail, some succeed, some succumb to a greed,
some detach from the bling and surpass every vain imagining,
while others are trapped in this asphalt jungles wrath.
(2:06-2:18)
Welcome to the rhyme realm
where the rhythm of the rise dwells
and the vision of your mind swells
as your inner heaven overcomes internal hell.
(2:31) Now break the spell of temptation's elements,
keep developin' speech with elegance,
beats with resonance,
and teach with reverence.
Indelible potential is within your pens
so reach on in to deep inkwells within
and sink on in 'till your on the brink of bringin' in a new gem.
We're producin' and unloosenin' the words within,
we're servin' blends of words and truths,
and urgin' you to curb the feuds
and nurse the roots to burst as fruits
conducive to the search to find solutions to
the myriad tyrannous hues of serious blues.
(3:10) This is music, let us use it to renew,
let's infuse it with a new view and then use it
to improve the movement.
These are soothin' sounds that your groovin' in,
let em simmer in your mind,
inspirin' more than rhythm but reason divine.
The beat and the rhyme are breathin', and I
am keepin' an eye on the way that they rise
and sail upon the seas of the vibe.

[QwarterZ]

I don't get what the minute marks were for
I mean...you didn't up a beat....0_0 unless you did
but for a first post this was actually decent
I can tell this isn't your first time, but still
it could use a bit of work, some lines come across as bland

maybe it's the use of tryna make every line add up
or rhyme well, I don't know, either way it's still sick
cuz it actually makes a lot of sense what you are saying
hopefully this feed will entice you to drop more my friend
if not, it was good while it lasted...<3