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Please, take it personally.

Post by Omega Bill »

I drop lines like mortars and ur punches are on the brink of lame
Cuz only time Qwarterz hit hard is at the bar durin drinkin games!

Who the fuck is Kau The Lion? Isn't the name Kau Hawaiian?
This nigga got Anime in his sig, say he aint a nerd, well Kau is Lyin!

Who's the new white bread with a shaved head that might be essentially dead
Cuz Im killin him with the fact that the only Flipside to his raps is they eventually end!

Spit flames at Dr. Jeckyll, scorch his skin and leave him with a blistered side
Cuz me against him is an easy win, and I know I could make this Mister Hyde!

Beat this kid until his brain pops, dont know what hit em till the pain stops
A storms brewin n the only thing Gutta good for is catchin fuckin rain drops!

More kids with Beast in their name, like theyre all hypnotized mindleslly, terminally
And Im somethin like a Hypnotist the way I can leave A-B catching Z's permenantly!

Always the same shit, different crew, its unfortunate but Ill have is pain for you
Few things are better un-said, but I can leave Crimson wit a redder head then that bitch Laroux!

If his name is Holy Water than I must be something like the Devils Dirt
The way I can leave his body with more holes than a scene kids Rebel Shirt!

Audible Thoughts verses rustier than nautical rot, half your bars dont even rhyme
He has a Frank Lucas mentality, but the only similarity is his lines are a crime on the mind!

I could spit more but this is just a warning, dont wanna completely leave ya teeth sore
You can ask the last 4 people I had beef with, except none of them come around anymore!

Been gone for awhile, but Im back for domination and ruinin this environment
Cuz puttin the gloves back on is like the combination of Mike and Clay comin outta retirement!

I'm just getting warmed back up.
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Re: Please, take it personally.

Post by - Mutual - »

well this big mother is back, and swingin to kill

I drop lines like mortars and ur punches are on the brink of lame
Cuz only time Qwarterz hit hard is at the bar durin drinkin games!

meh wasnt bad multies did well nameplay was ehh nice opener

Who the fuck is Kau The Lion? Isn't the name Kau Hawaiian?
This nigga got Anime in his sig, say he aint a nerd, well Kau is Lyin!

this was abit better flow picked up and the nameplay i felt more

Who's the new white bread with a shaved head that might be essentially dead
Cuz Im killin him with the fact that the only Flipside to his raps is they eventually end!

didnt rhyme to me lol nothin more to say on this bar

Spit flames at Dr. Jeckyll, scorch his skin and leave him with a blistered side
Cuz me against him is an easy win, and I know I could make this Mister Hyde!

that was nice flowed well and the bar was hot shit

Beat this kid until his brain pops, dont know what hit em till the pain stops
A storms brewin n the only thing Gutta good for is catchin fuckin rain drops!

seemed to be building up on the flow and the punch was nice

More kids with Beast in their name, like theyre all hypnotized mindleslly, terminally
And Im somethin like a Hypnotist the way I can leave A-B catching Z's permenantly!

i liked this bar, had some kind of punch that i liked flowed well one of the best bars in the drop no doubt

Always the same shit, different crew, its unfortunate but Ill have is pain for you
Few things are better un-said, but I can leave Crimson wit a redder head then that bitch Laroux!

bar seemed a lil forced the relevance was lost lol the flow was consistent so meh

If his name is Holy Water than I must be something like the Devils Dirt
The way I can leave his body with more holes than a scene kids Rebel Shirt!

lol nice flow okay bar

Audible Thoughts verses rustier than nautical rot, half your bars dont even rhyme
He has a Frank Lucas mentality, but the only similarity is his lines are a crime on the mind!

this was a nice bar had that flow and some good vocab with the multies

I could spit more but this is just a warning, dont wanna completely leave ya teeth sore
You can ask the last 4 people I had beef with, except none of them come around anymore!

didnt quite have that smooth flow but it was an okay filler bar imo

Been gone for awhile, but Im back for domination and ruinin this environment
Cuz puttin the gloves back on is like the combination of Mike and Clay comin outta retirement!

good finisher

overall this wasnt a bad piece i enjoyed reading this shit the nameplay was good all over and the flow stayed pretty consistent nothing wowing through the bars but nice hope you gonna stick around for a bit now good to have you back keep this shit coming
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Who's the new white bread with a shaved head that might be essentially dead
Cuz Im killin him with the fact that the only Flipside to his raps is they eventually end!
dope..very smooth
More kids with Beast in their name, like theyre all hypnotized mindleslly, terminally
And Im somethin like a Hypnotist the way I can leave A-B catching Z's permenantly!
wooooo.. i got a mention ha..nice line atleast it wasnt a stomach/crunch line.
Been gone for awhile, but Im back for domination and ruinin this environment
Cuz puttin the gloves back on is like the combination of Mike and Clay comin outta retirement!
nice..

overall cool drop Arnold.


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Who the fuck is Kau The Lion? Isn't the name Kau Hawaiian?
This nigga got Anime in his sig, say he aint a nerd, well Kau is Lyin
Dope Bar here Dude.. Nice Name Play
Who's the new white bread with a shaved head that might be essentially dead
Cuz Im killin him with the fact that the only Flipside to his raps is they eventually end!
? Thanks FOr The Mention Tho...lulz
More kids with Beast in their name, like theyre all hypnotized mindleslly, terminally
And Im somethin like a Hypnotist the way I can leave A-B catching Z's permenantly!
Dope Lil Name Play THere
I could spit more but this is just a warning, dont wanna completely leave ya teeth sore
You can ask the last 4 people I had beef with, except none of them come around anymore!
Thats Dope Right There LOL


Nice Lil Drop And Use Of Name Play There... This Was A Nice Reintruduction Verse Right Here
BANG BANG!!!! I Shot U Down
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Thanks for the feed. Leave a link to something you need feed on.
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Re: Please, take it personally.

Post by complexity »

Alpha Bill wrote:I drop lines like mortars and ur punches are on the brink of lame
Cuz only time Qwarterz hit hard is at the bar durin drinkin games!

[Perfect punchline, if you go back and read your most early stuff, the idea of you being capable of writing something like wouldn't come to anyones head]


Who the fuck is Kau The Lion? Isn't the name Kau Hawaiian?
This nigga got Anime in his sig, say he aint a nerd, well Kau is Lyin!

[Cool flow. Decent bar.]


Who's the new white bread with a shaved head that might be essentially dead
Cuz Im killin him with the fact that the only Flipside to his raps is they eventually end!

[Good punch. The rhyme was alright.]

Spit flames at Dr. Jeckyll, scorch his skin and leave him with a blistered side
Cuz me against him is an easy win, and I know I could make this Mister Hyde!

[Not bad. I thought the only one who referred to people as Mister was Double Fl]


Beat this kid until his brain pops, dont know what hit em till the pain stops
A storms brewin n the only thing Gutta good for is catchin fuckin rain drops!

[Probably a recycled concept, still nicely setup]

More kids with Beast in their name, like theyre all hypnotized mindleslly, terminally
And Im somethin like a Hypnotist the way I can leave A-B catching Z's permenantly!

[Awesome!]

Always the same shit, different crew, its unfortunate but Ill have is pain for you
Few things are better un-said, but I can leave Crimson wit a redder head then that bitch Laroux!

[Don't know who she is, I'm sure it makes sense though]

If his name is Holy Water than I must be something like the Devils Dirt
The way I can leave his body with more holes than a scene kids Rebel Shirt!

[Bang!]

Audible Thoughts verses rustier than nautical rot, half your bars dont even rhyme
He has a Frank Lucas mentality, but the only similarity is his lines are a crime on the mind!

[That could have been worded better]

I could spit more but this is just a warning, dont wanna completely leave ya teeth sore
You can ask the last 4 people I had beef with, except none of them come around anymore!

[I especially liked this line. Now name them! lol]


Been gone for awhile, but Im back for domination and ruinin this environment
Cuz puttin the gloves back on is like the combination of Mike and Clay comin outta retirement!

[Cool]

I'm just getting warmed back up.

Probably one of the better come back pieces barring my fabulous "I Go The Distance"! Just kidding.

Enjoyed it.
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0_0 honestly I can't take it personally
no matter tho'...still a nice little drop
keep it up big dawg I'll be rooting for you.....Eden
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Thanks for the feed.

Leave a link to something you need feed on, man.
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Post by werd »

rugged eros broke that shit down nice son
werd up Alapha Bill
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