holy - german goes english (life is a sea)

[holywater]

yeah im a german typer..wanna to try it in english as well..
hope its not too bad... so..enjoy..


when p.diddy calls, i might be in the biggest malls
with a billion dollars../ youre frightned of biggy smalls
cos u got abused of niggers/ as a new born kid
buddy.., now u want to know how to use a pistole..
how to introduce your sister.../
to a pimp, to get rich, with some youporn-videos/
ya know...tupac listened to my music mixtapes../
stupid bitchass/ yeah..you were a bitch in college.../
..now youre a bitch in job ...buddy..
whos spending his night..with free cocksucking.../
im rich, hes got nothing/..except for a drugpill,
and a duffbeer../buddy..it's selfdestruction/
so u have to decide../ to step thru this life../
or to commit damn suicide... buddy..

[chorus]
life is a sea..
first youre trying to see
the wide of the beach
then u dive...
bro, you're diving too deep
life is a sea

[Ambiguous Realm]

The chorus is alright, not feeling the overall direction of the verse, it's also difficult to find the rhymes, I'm sure in your accent it sounds like it rhymes so i can't say much for that however in English it doesn't...and i don't like the word "buddy" lol.. keep droppin

[holywater]

thx, yeah.. hmm nono the rhyme thing..is kinda habit of the best german typer
its another fresh kind to type.. sometimes..the last syllable is missing..on purpose.its kinda "arrogant-style", but no matter..i will learn the rules of english lyrics..

[young_jobe]

ur a black german?

[FlipSide]

It Seems U Need To Do A Lot Of Reading And U Are in The Best Place For It... Look At The Verses in The Writtens And Get A Hang Of THe Way Writing Is Done In English... Use Of Metaphores And Syllables... I Saw U Wrote the Way U Enunciate As In The Word Pistole..I Can See Where U Coming From Bro..Its All About Elevating Ur Skill... Jus Do Some Reading And Then GIve It Another Shot.. U Should Be Better By Next Drop

[holywater]

edit: uh too much blabla

thx for your feed,
yeah..the problem is..i do not even listening to german hiphop
im just a damn good typer in german..., but its all new in english
you know my vocs arent enaugh to write credibile.., so i hope
i can learn some important phrases hehe..and learn how to tell tha stories..

but i think u can see some technical skills? if u look careful you will see a 4 - 5 syllable rhyme-level.. but ofc i dont know if this rhymes are like "house-mouse" foryou..

peace buddy

[The Man]

Hi deaf shady.

[Borat]

Ahaha for real!!!

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[holywater]

Hi deaf shady.

nope..im no fake-account
check ip or something else
im just german thats why i suck in english

[QwarterZ]

I figured you on some other shit
maybe you are who knows...you got Cam in your sig
so that tells me you toying around
Cam is a dope rapper and you may be toying with his style
which is cool, but you DID come out at a bad time
I mean we seen many a biter around here...

so I'ma just say this was alright
the hook was cool, and the flow was cool
but I really can't state much more till facts is facts
peace dude

[holywater]

hey.. na.. iam really german
can check ip..

i dont really know what i did wrong?
so u had a lots of byters here?
yeah..but my textisnt bitet at all
its a pretty fast written freetype..

so ..im curious..so is it bad or good
and whats bad whats good? im totally new in the english scene
thats realtalk..forreal..buddy..im serious

peace bro