I wanna rock right now

[crimson]

I used to be a Juvenile, but that was in the past dummy
Now I stay mannie fresh , blame it on the cash money
Never was a young buck, but I kept them guns up
Started out with 50 cents, then I got my ones up
Money in the banks & that yayo got me hyped man
The Game in my blood flow, success is my life span
Know a few dogs on death row, but im from the hood right
For them imma ruff ryde from morning, eve & suge knight
Ya know what my mood’s like, rap is a fiasco
I threw ‘em for a loop, Ay! Still getting that cash though
I was never half steppin’, but I kept the Kane stashed
Then I put the roc down, watch how quick the dames dash
Kept up with the Jones’, a killa who don’t like juelz
Still a nigga with attitude, my chains got some ice cubes
Use to fuck with canibus, moving on to young ‘dro
Now my eyes red man, my weight & my funds low
So they call me slim thug, the aftermath is shady
See the world through a crooked eye, …yeah that shit is crazy

[AbZ The Beast]

this was dope as fuck man.

Money in the banks & that yayo got me hyped man
The Game in my blood flow, success is my life span

Use to fuck with canibus, moving on to young ‘dro
Now my eyes red man, my weight & my funds low
So they call me slim thug, the aftermath is shady
See the world through a crooked eye, …yeah that shit is crazy

this was a fun, good read, alot name plays.cool shit

[Quix]

i allways give credit where credit is due ... this shit flowed nice! likeed the name dropping! ... sounding hood!

[Mistah Unknown]

Dam thats was dope. I enjoyed reading the whole verse. I liked the way u used the artist name and fliped it wit ur style. goog shit keep them coming.

[Munteskue_lol]

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[complexity]

This was pretty nice, it's almost just like this video game piece I keep trying to write but I had to battle all last night & tonight damnit. Nice to see someone write things on the outside of the box, not the inside.

That sounds more difficult to do.

While this was done perfectly, it wasn't exactly that outright brilliant of a concept. It's been done before in many different forms. And the names kind of lend themselves to easy wordplay because they were chosen for the particular plays. I'm not saying this was easy, many wouldn't be capable of doing this type of drop.

I really would probably quote the whole thing for its consistency and flow. The only part I didn't like, I felt you could have done that Suge Knight line better.

Good read. Also admirable length, any more and it would have been overkill.