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QwarterZ
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Scatter Brained

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Golden plated, I know why your flow is basic
you go to lace it with unknown facts so I'd hate it
so degraded, prayed on, as the locals praised it
go to tape it, and say yo man you know you made it
let's borrow a grip, and your style is followed by kids
thoughtful to it, still the the tip to them bottles'll flip
couldn't see it, till you recieved a monocle as a gift
telling the youth the top isn't really too impossible to get
glamour and glitz, you got it, went from spam and the grits
to a plate full of the most devolped food the salmon is mixed
your grammer it slips, you forget everything, manners is shit
change your whole persona, spittin' about hammers and clips
how you handle your shit, CHEERS, now erryone knows ur name
so you gained from the ho's and brain and the blow you made
sold for days, kept your toast at play, let the soldiers stray
and if something ever went down, you know it'll all go away
behold array, dust yourself off man, you ain't goin' to flake
American Gangster, you sell sun blue, let it work itself out
plus if they need a fix, drugs are good, you heard it helps now
ignorant to everything surrounding you, who knows why???
don't know whose gon' ride, your whole view goes one side
you don't pay attention to shit! cuz you so uptight....
you know, plus life is simpler when it only involves you
cuz you know where to get off when the world revolves too
if shit got too awful, get off fool, before someone tries to off you
take your spot, it's all just the daily workings of dudes on the come up
that's just life, and that's how it is, when your body layin' in the box
and liquor is all that you know.....what....up......
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Re: Scatter Brained

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shiit this is a slap in the face to kids my age who just know how to fuck hoes, get drunk and live in fantasy land. i feel this drop a lot, the multis are great, but i feel some were forced. I guess thats just me cuz im not a big fan of a frenzy of multis. overall the message was portrayed really well, keep spittin
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Re: Scatter Brained

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let's borrow a grip, and your style is followed by kids
thoughtful to it, still the the tip to them bottles'll flip
couldn't see it, till you recieved a monocle as a gift
telling the youth the top isn't really too impossible to get
Cant Help But To Think THis A Shot At Me... Weak Attempt Tho LOL
your grammer it slips, you forget everything, manners is shit
change your whole persona, spittin' about hammers and clips
how you handle your shit, CHEERS, now erryone knows ur name
so you gained from the ho's and brain and the blow you made
U Went Hard on Those Three Lines But Only The Third One Had Something Resembling Play ....
American Gangster, you sell sun blue, let it work itself out
plus if they need a fix, drugs are good, you heard it helps now
ignorant to everything surrounding you, who knows why???
don't know whose gon' ride, your whole view goes one side
This Was Better... Seemed To Be Going Hard Again Flowed Well And The Lil Drugs Help Now Was Ok.. Like Dude Was Born Yesterday.. If That Was The Reference...
if shit got too awful, get off fool, before someone tries to off you
take your spot, it's all just the daily workings of dudes on the come up
that's just life, and that's how it is, when your body layin' in the box
and liquor is all that you know.....what....up......
Again It Was Good Until The Last Line Where U Totally Slacked... Made me Thirsty Tho.. Like What Up!?
It Seems its A Dirty Diss From The Old QZ ... The Flow Was Good Multies Were There The Word Play When U Did Use It Was Ok .. But Lacked Punches And Things Of The Nature U Would Incorporate In Disses.. But On The Other Hand Its A Refreshing Drop From What u been Dropping Lately... Nice Shit lol
BANG BANG!!!! I Shot U Down
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Re: Scatter Brained

Post by AbZ The Beast »

glamour and glitz, you got it, went from spam and the grits
to a plate full of the most devolped food the salmon is mixed
your grammer it slips, you forget everything, manners is shit
change your whole persona, spittin' about hammers and clips
very dope seg. could of quoted the whole damn thing man.
great flow, really digging the message.

dope shit man


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