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Where Am I?

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Have you ever, felt the need to stand out a bit more
as the world splits your, on a downward spiral, spit poor
wishin' you did shit more, more shit pilin' on your sense or
maybe you just confused when you stuck in the moment
if your, contemplating whats goin' on around you, explore
the vast amount of emptiness that surrounds you, next door
is a empty house, and the world seems like it's so distant
in a instant the risk or, the problem at hand seems to get more
proficient, see, in your, clearest of senses it hits you
and everything that dephicts you seems like it is what it isn't
all you can make from the vision, is that this place isn't worth a visit
the shit you did, well it doesn't seem like it's worth the lonelieness
the only shit you can think of is that someones waitin' for your only kiss
your only love, your the only one that knows what bein' lonely is
so you start to memorize the days, count down every second passin'
the only twist is your head is spannin', spinnin' into rejection, damnin'
the planet and everythin' it gave you, not even you could save you
you start to envision a place, where only you could simulate views
you feel so smitten with hate, all you could do is follow provisions and wait
hoping that the vision you made, is only your whole description of fate
while your descriptions in place, the mirror of the figure just withers away
you start to picture this state, and imagine will you ever get away
while he's smilin' in your face, tellin' you to leave, you savor the bitterest taste
lookin' to the stars, wishin' you could be up where you used to be
usually, and continously, you start to fade into this unusual dream
it's like your whole mind has gone through some changes, truthfully
it did, cuz your still stuck in this space, tryna find the beauty you'd see
on a daily basis, your glee, for this very moment has got the facts in disarray
you go through the daily ritual, day by day, night by night, back to this place
it's a wrap you could say, tomorrow seems like the moment they all spat on ya grave
it's been half a decade, the worlds changed, your delirious...........
and you don't know if you want to go back to that phase
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I liked the flow and the structure was nice. Liked how you kept the same word scheme up in multiple bars. Deep drop. Nice.
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in a instant the risk or, the problem at hand seems to get more
proficient, see, in your, clearest of senses it hits you
and everything that dephicts you seems like it is what it isn't
all you can make from the vision, is that this place isn't worth a visit
This was nice... nicely put together...words
the shit you did, well it doesn't seem like it's worth the lonelieness
the only shit you can think of is that someones waitin' for your only kiss
your only love, your the only one that knows what bein' lonely is
Maaaadddd poetic.... nice
the planet and everythin' it gave you, not even you could save you
you start to envision a place, where only you could simulate views
nice as well
while he's smilin' in your face, tellin' you to leave, you savor the bitterest taste
lookin' to the stars, wishin' you could be up where you used to be
usually, and continously, you start to fade into this unusual dream
it's like your whole mind has gone through some changes, truthfully
growin up sssssssson

i think this was madd poetic my dude.. u been madd distilled with it... good drop
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Re: Where Am I?

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cuz I remember writing that piece a loooooooong time ago

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Re: Where Am I?

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the shit you did, well it doesn't seem like it's worth the lonelieness
the only shit you can think of is that someones waitin' for your only kiss
your only love, your the only one that knows what bein' lonely is


I really liked this part fam ^^


Shit came offf Realll nice!! i allways enjoy reading yah shit!
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