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Break Me - Ambition
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Re: Break Me - Ambition
this aint bad, it's a bit quiet, the rhymes are nice, the hook wasn't bad singing was a lil off but good, overall a good listen keep this shit comin Haz
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect
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Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect
!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Re: Break Me - Ambition
z share is bullshit...i cant dl it...soundclick it duke...if not ill try manana
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Re: Break Me - Ambition
Rhymes are good, I feel like the flow and delivery could have been better. Some of the lines seemed like they had so few syllables that the flow was off, delivery was just blah.
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Re: Break Me - Ambition
I thought the beat was pretty straight...had a retro-disco meets Hip-Hop kinda sound to it. But with a beat like that...you should've sped your flow up a bit. Spittin slower on it like you did made it sound pretty choppy at parts when you did your bars. So in other words, I've heard you spit better material at times. I think you're going thru a stage that i myself went thru...which is experimenting with your flow. Seeing what you can do...and what you can't do. But see it s a learning lesson. Other than that....it's a nice track. Keep experimenting...keep elevating.
Overall I'll give this one a solid 8 out of 10
Overall I'll give this one a solid 8 out of 10
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Re: Break Me - Ambition
LOL a 8 out of 10. you gave me a better rating on this one then i gave myself. N yeah i Think your right, good looking out on the pointers.
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Re: Break Me - Ambition
ohhhh lol you came off hard with this style dude.. i like it though.. gives it a lil black eyed peas feel... at some parts ya flows kinda slow.. like a word short... the hook was ok.. i think like kurse said u exerimented well this.. I just got a gravel pit feel as well... Just the tempo.. i really like how u came Madd original with this.. ups
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Re: Break Me - Ambition
the beat is pretty sick.. kinda like a Blood Hound Gang vibe to it.. you even rap kinda like them.. first thought that came to mind was "Discovery Channel" track lol.. i would like to hear more emotion in your voice.. specially in hooks and all... your flow IMO is average.. nuttin that stood out... lyrics are ok, flow was good for the type of beat.. over all this is a good track.. i'd give this 8/10
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I can do everything through him who gives me strength.
Psalms 23:4
Even though I walk through the valley of the shadow of death, I will fear no evil, for you are with me; your rod and your staff, they comfort me.
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