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yeah seems a real quick piece man, the flow wasn't bad but as you said it was like a free so it was basic you still did well with the mutlies and it's a good way to vent shit so man for what it is, it wasnt bad keep that shit comin i would apprecciate feed on my drop
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect
its short and to the point nice for what it is with the subject it touches on if u feel like it make a verse its real stuff we can relate to and u got the talent id like to see what u come up with but that just me....
Always bound to blow up like loaded gauges
It's a matter of time before I explode on pages
I sweat at night with thoughts of the longer days
Never would I think that life belongs this way
Nana's been gone but now I'm sad that Papi's missin
I wake in the morning to kiss the pot he lives in
My heads empty with all my thoughts exposed
Sometimes I almost think I lost my flow
I hear a voice I don't wanna maybe it's the reaper
I climb back in my head but the shit gets deeper
Wish I could talk to the angel of death to gain my respect
I'm always wishin I could get rid of the pain in my chest
Real Solid.. Stitched Together Crazy, different, u utilized a lot of elements in this Lil verse lol
i agree with flip side my favorite bar was his first listed
pretty deep for being so short. i liked it tho always good to see personal drops i usually dont post mines but good shit, man i always enjoy reading you steezes keep elevated
"see you shouldnt be afraid of me..
you should be afraid of all the people in the streets
This was purdy nice TOYH, the emotion is deep
the words you use were cool, but then again it's a key
either way this was a good drop man, nice lil' drop
The line that really stuck out to me was the pot he lives in. The simplicity probably hurt this piece a bit because it did have emotion.
"My heads empty with all my thoughts exposed
Sometimes I almost think I lost my flow
I hear a voice I don't wanna maybe it's the reaper
I climb back in my head but the shit gets deeper"
