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Why Not? (A Love Story)

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QwarterZ
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Why Not? (A Love Story)

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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sBx2uRRMOyg












It's already bad, it's like they pushed me into a deadly crash
I'm either Wyle E Coyote, or Sylvester the cat mixed with Yosemite Sam
missin' the brakes, hittin' like eggs, wait did I just imply I'm crackin'
well besides untimely fashion, it's like I'm slow to understand, idly passin'
if the world was based on verbiage, then I guess you'd dephict wisely passion
I don't know, I'm high off momentum, and tryna decide what size ya pants is
someone get me a circus tent, if anyone on this world deserves this rent
you deserve the cents, well without getting nasty then you deserve the sense
whatever my purpose been I guess you could put it back in, call it percocet
and as that air that circles vents, allows us to release inhibitions and deserv-ed sex
I guess you'd swear we was flirtin' chest to breast, see honey I'ma nervous-wreck
see they cut out my eyes, with a silver spoon, as the rays filled the room
the blood gushed out, no cryin' over spilt milk, I shot up and killed the moon
all I could do to fulfill the mood, is take mankind make it kneel before me
I swore the sword formin' in stone, won't afford to twist unless it's Dorthy
see if you support me, the crown will never leave the educated bilingual
let me filter out these dust heads, it's like I cleared the gutter from my shingles
if anything will come between us, it better be the last moon between Venus
what a lack of convenience, I had to dumb it down for you, taste the genius
back to the upscale apartment where the roachs outweigh the candy assortments
the bag of potato chips that stack by the portion, the lil' mutt that survived the abortion
the couch that has it's stuffing torn in, but nada thing could mess up this performance
I'm off my rocker, shit I got a cane that supports everything for you, undertaker
let me carry you to the deep bellows of lulzdom, atleast....till I become a waiter
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Re: Why Not? (A Love Story)

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You should do some audio if you already haven't, because I can't really get your flow down in written form. This isn't really a complaint, and the problem might be mine, but it seems as if the flow might be off, even with the quality punchlines in your verse.
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Re: Why Not? (A Love Story)

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yea it's off a bit, I could edit this to make it seem better
but I don't know I just wrote it
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Re: Why Not? (A Love Story)

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I Heard This Beat Nice Choice By Apathy & Celph Titled..

Overall This Drop Was Dope & A Nice Selection Ta Choose With The Beat.

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I don't know, I'm high off momentum, and tryna decide what size ya pants is
someone get me a circus tent, if anyone on this world deserves this rent
you deserve the cents, well without getting nasty then you deserve the sense
whatever my purpose been I guess you could put it back in, call it percocet
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