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From Bliss To Blisters

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I've had some good days and some sour-minded/
Wish I could tape life and somehow rewind it/
Reminded of times when things had seemed better/
But then I woke up from the sleep with dreams severed/
Trapped in this state between coma and alertness/
While I roam the earth with no other purpose/
So what I'm worthless, that's my own label/
Don't pass judgement just because your home is so "stable"/
Save those old fables, they'll make a great movie/
Til you hit the part where your son Jacob raped Suzie/
Save your grief, her heart doesn't need it/
Just shows how perfection can mask the darkest of secrets/
Life's an illusion but I'm starting to see it/
The truth is out there its just hard to believe it/
Depart this speech with a piece to enlighten/
Every "light" has a shadow for a secret to hide in/


It doesn't take a genius to prove/
That in every lie is a little piece of the truth/
We cheated our youth, always wished we were older/
Now we long to be young as the finish creeps closer/
Trying to win this game but folded our best cards/
Too busy peeking over fences at the next yard/
It looks greener but its deceived for ages/
Convinced that improvement always means the greatest/
I've seen the changes and its hard to explain/
How people throw away their lives for a marginal gain/
Its part of the game, starved for a spark of the fame/
Started with flame, collapsed and martyred a name/
No amount of logic and reason combined/
Could justify changing for a piece of the pie/
Its easy to spy someone with more cash than brains/
Just watch the trends and notice how fast they change/
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This drop was deep and im feelin the whole concept you touched it perfectly i enjoyed this one alot......

sick drop....
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man this is damm dope
i felt a nice eminem vibe of this
same sorta flow imo
the vocab was good
the mutlies wus dope
the whole thing was deep shyt
this was great my fave part was the whole thing
dope shyt mayne
keep'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Haha Em... I wrote it to a Brother Ali track... Chain Link. Preciate the feedback though. Quick responses too, damn. I just posted this shit.
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^^just tryin keep this shit active ya kno...

drop some feed on mine pls...
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I love this man.
Great flow and some good messages in it
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I've had some good days and some sour-minded/
Wish I could tape life and somehow rewind it/

I Feel Like That Every Day.. Strong Opener..

Reminded of times when things had seemed better/
But then I woke up from the sleep with dreams severed/

Deep..

Trapped in this state between coma and alertness/
While I roam the earth with no other purpose/

Loving This.. Keep It Comin...

So what I'm worthless, that's my own label/
Don't pass judgement just because your home is so "stable"/

Alright.. The Vent's On !! ..

Save those old fables, they'll make a great movie/
Til you hit the part where your son Jacob raped Suzie/

wow .. Sick Picture ..

Save your grief, her heart doesn't need it/
Just shows how perfection can mask the darkest of secrets/

Hell Yeah Wrote a Paper About That Today...

Life's an illusion but I'm starting to see it/
The truth is out there its just hard to believe it/

Very Hard 2 Believe It .. Keep Da Potency Up!..

Depart this speech with a piece to enlighten/
Every "light" has a shadow for a secret to hide in/

Hiddin?.. Dope...

This First Little Clip is just Raw In My Own Opinion..
It Hold's Alot Of Weight In The Sense Of Purpose/Meaning...
I Know i Shouldnt Break It Down Bar By Bar Cause It's a Solid Verse But i Dunno i Rather Just Do it Bar By Bar...

Loved The Jack Raped Suzie Line .. Shit just Paint's a Sick Pic In My Mind...(Flow Was Good , Multi's Up.. Meaning Flowing)


It doesn't take a genius to prove/
That in every lie is a little piece of the truth/

Lmfao Let Them Know Ruck..

We cheated our youth, always wished we were older/
Now we long to be young as the finish creeps closer/

God Damn .. Shit is Soo True...U Really Stringed This Together Nicely..

Trying to win this game but folded our best cards/
Too busy peeking over fences at the next yard/

Lmfao Dood.. Nice..

It looks greener but its deceived for ages/
Convinced that improvement always means the greatest/

Word..

I've seen the changes and its hard to explain/
How people throw away their lives for a marginal gain/

Feel You.. ( Nice End Rhymes )

Its part of the game, starved for a spark of the fame/
Started with flame, collapsed and martyred a name/

Haha .. Now U Start Spazzin.. Lovin The Multi's.. Felt Like Any Other Line Outshined This Though , Cause The Lines Above Have Soo Much More Meaning in My Opinion...< My Opinion lol

No amount of logic and reason combined/
Could justify changing for a piece of the pie/

I Know .. Lol It's Sad..


Its easy to spy someone with more cash than brains/
Just watch the trends and notice how fast they change/

Word Up!!... Strong Closer...


Yo so This Piece Was just Raw .. U Brought Alot Of Meaning 2 The Table N I Loved It .. Can't Really Complain About Anythin...
Multi's Were On Point .. Substance Was Up In My Opinion... It Was Strung Together Nicely... Keep Droppin Homie ..
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Post by K KiLLaH »

this shit is sick the message was dope

fave part

I've seen the changes and its hard to explain/
How people throw away their lives for a marginal gain/
Its part of the game, starved for a spark of the fame/
Started with flame, collapsed and martyred a name/
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This Was More Poetic Than Other Drops ive Read From u So That Was interesting. There's Really No Point in Mentioning ur Multis Or Flow Because ive Yet To See a Kink in Them. a Lot Of Quotables Let Me List a Few.

Reminded of times when things had seemed better/
But then I woke up from the sleep with dreams severed/

^i Think Everyone Can Relate To That On Some Level, u Did a Good Job at Putting it in Context.

We cheated our youth, always wished we were older/
Now we long to be young as the finish creeps closer/

^So Fucking True. Like Hazard Said :lol:

it's True u Take ur More innocent Years For Granted And Wish u Could Somehow Go Back And Relish it More. But That's The Beauty Of Life, u Keep Learning And Strive To Seize The Day More While Looking To The Future.[/Philosophy] Lol, a Bit Blazed So im Rambling a Bit.

Really Thoughtful Drop Keep at it.
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