zoom freestyle

[Innocent]

Hi, this is a song im working on, some feedback would be greatly apreciated, thanks.

[Deciple]

1st off Welcome to illest lyrics.. im Deciple...
ok to business now... Turn the beat up some.. quality could be better but you work with what you can... you sound like an off-brand Lil Wayne, your flow for the style you were spitting was ok.. You need to mix it up a little, it was very traditional, you gotta put emotion in it.. but im not sure what to call this... Post says freestyle, but you said its a song you are working on.. if its a freestyle.. its ight, if its a song, then you need to cut down the verse a little, add emotion, multi's would be to bad either,
you probably thinking "wow, this dude is hammering me" seriously bro criticism like this lets you know what to improve on, and you grow alot from peoples feedback... for your 1st drop it was ok..
Keep dropping man, again welcome to illest

[Innocent]

1st off Welcome to illest lyrics.. im Deciple...
ok to business now... Turn the beat up some.. quality could be better but you work with what you can... you sound like an off-brand Lil Wayne, your flow for the style you were spitting was ok.. You need to mix it up a little, it was very traditional, you gotta put emotion in it.. but im not sure what to call this... Post says freestyle, but you said its a song you are working on.. if its a freestyle.. its ight, if its a song, then you need to cut down the verse a little, add emotion, multi's would be to bad either,
you probably thinking "wow, this dude is hammering me" seriously bro criticism like this lets you know what to improve on, and you grow alot from peoples feedback... for your 1st drop it was ok..
Keep dropping man, again welcome to illest

Thanks for the tips, really appreciate, even tho u destroyed me there,lol. I guess its better than someone lying to me that its good. Anyways i'm just trying to make something that would work in the main stream rap as a single before trying to be creative if u know what i mean. Yeah i am influenced by wayne alot, i started this rap thing about a year ago and still trying to figure it out. I wrote freestyle cause it was in freestyle format although i was going to use it for a full song with a hook and more verses.

[Deciple]

Well if you wanna do main stream then lil wayne a good role model, he doing a killing in main stream, but if you wanna be a good rapper i would follow a different role model.. lol..
yeah man, people dont lie around here, sometimes you get half around about feed.. but for the most part, if your track is garbage illest will tell you but if your stuff is good or needs improvement to be good, we will definitely let you know...

[STUD_PHaMOUS]

you need to work on the basics before recording, such as writing ability & flow, it seemed like you were all over the place to be honest, like you didnt know how to stay on beat..keep working though

[FlipSide]

It sounds like this is something u would kick on the corner... but u just getting started so ...U got the weezy flow down but somehow i think it brings ur credibility down a lil.. Once u get comfortable ull develop ur own variation of the style.. which in turn would earn u more respect from this site... I would like to see u write something and push the envelope

[Innocent]

you need to work on the basics before recording, such as writing ability & flow, it seemed like you were all over the place to be honest, like you didnt know how to stay on beat..keep working though

Yeah i hear you, how do you think i could work on my flow? is it just practicing or is there anything else i can do? Thanks for the comments anyways

-- Wed Jun 30, 2010 9:47 am --

It sounds like this is something u would kick on the corner... but u just getting started so ...U got the weezy flow down but somehow i think it brings ur credibility down a lil.. Once u get comfortable ull develop ur own variation of the style.. which in turn would earn u more respect from this site... I would like to see u write something and push the envelope

Yeah i've written some other stuff which is a bit more complex, i've written some concious rap and also some more of this main stream stuff, i try to write lots of sick punchlines, i think i jus need to deliver them better. but yeh i've got more stuff that i'll drop soon, thanks for the comments anyways.

[Lawgix]

Ruggz don't like this.

ditto...

[Sentus]

The mixing on this is pretty bad. And basically what everyone else says. You need to work on your lyrics and flow alot. Delivery was alright.

[MesaR]

Ruggz don't like this.

Hit the nail on the head with this one.

[HKX]

Emotion is lacking and u sound like a young ass Weezy man. U need sum work keep practing man.