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Arvincible
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people keep on sayin i should drop the dreams to make it
and the hopes that ill be takin to a level where im famous
they keep sayin that its dangerous in this game and
when im stackin all these haters that im probably mistaken..
then test my will and pull me towards the earth
bring me down n tell me only the words that hurt
well if ur gonna say im close to the worst youve heard
then you can blow me.. you fuckin herbs are dirt
u cant tell me what each verb is worth, or what i stand for
you hate to love me, disrepect yet you demand more
got me writing till my hands sore, but being great is costly
and none of you fakes can stop me, jst pop me up n drop me
will i feel the impact to the surface? Is it a fact i deserve this?
Cuz I chose to live with an "actual" purpose,
and added my own direction by subtracting the service,
No churches for me cuz i know for a fact im imperfect..
damn me to hell if u think my status is worthless
but i bring the static to circuits, send faggots to circus
im the x factor.. back to put work in.. smackin then murkin
these wack ass actors emergin..
with this sample im "keyin things up" like i attacked a suburban
vandalizin ur whole get up, experience is what u lack like a virgin..


smh random multis, unfinished, whatever...
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this wasnt bad, had a consistent flow to it but wasnt really feelin too much of the piece, i know this was only a key though cus i've seen you drop fire, but it got better towards the end really picked up, but then this is a shorter piece but still keep that shit comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Re: keyed

Post by FlipSide »

i though it was descent..u had a nice lil topic to go off of.. some multies here in there... again it was cool... and it has direction which i allways like... i havent seen much from u and would like for u to drop "real" Piece to see whats good
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Post by JDR »

Cuz I chose to live with an "actual" purpose,
and added my own direction by subtracting the service

Favorite bar and it added a more complex approach than the rest of the drop IMO.

Like the flow in this.

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