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Haz
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Unthinkable

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Locked The Genius Away My Minds a Cell
Can't Number Down My Tracks Only Time'll Tell
Though Fate Won't Snitch It Reminds Me Well
I Can't Expect For The Future To Drop in My Hands
It Falls Beyond My Cards Theres no Stopping The Plan
Whether Hot Or Not In Demand The Prophet'll Stand
Like Self Worth Not a Prophet By Man ..
Ain't Here 4 Shares But To Share When My Pocket Expands
Ain't Been As Far As I Wanna Go Cause Of Coma's Yo
Will It Put Me In Trauma? No..
I Still Got Some Room To Heat It Up Like Sauna Flow
Why Let The Drama Grow They Ain't Mature Is All ..
I Pick Myself Up Like Limo Dough They Can't Afford To Fall
I'm Up, Yall Sour..I Ironic I Still Sore More Then Yall ..
You Hate The Player Instead The Sport
I'm Taking In The Air Your Dead Of Course ..
I Checked Ya N Bounced It Like soon i'll Have Bread Ta Sort
Only God Can Judge Me Sonny Like I'm Ahead The Court ..
U Ain't Buddah Or Nothing.. Preaching Dude Ya Disgusting
Instead Of Cruising Your Rushing, What U Proving With Fussing?
I Ain't Telling Pressure Bye..Forever High..Just a Better Guy
Haters Think If I Mark X on a Chick Thats Where Treasure Lies..
You Ain't Suited For Grown Man Bizz I Ain't here To Measure Ties
Play Chicken With an immovable Force n get cha Feathers Fried..
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Re: Unthinkable

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The last line was the only one that stood out to me. The whole piece itself was pretty good but I've seen you do better so I was a little disappointed. I did like the topic though, and the rhyme scheme changed up here and there and that kept me entertained. Keep writing bro.
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Re: Unthinkable

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i actually though it was pretty good... but im used to more metas and punches from u... and more wordplay as well... but it also seems that u were tryna convey a message... A couple lines lead me to think that...but it was unclear a lil....just general...which is also cool...Not a bad drop by any means... actually i dig it.. Just more of a straight foward piece...and that can be appreciated...
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Re: Unthinkable

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This was purdy cool, different vibe from you
I'm used to you just wylin' out and shit
otherwise this was cool for a switch up
makes me think damn this dude is coming along nicely
keep writing bruh, and drop another track

yea...I said this shit was cool, sue me bitch
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Re: Unthinkable

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I Can't Expect For The Future To Drop in My Hands
It Falls Beyond My Cards Theres no Stopping The Plan
Whether Hot Or Not In Demand The Prophet'll Stand
Like Self Worth Not a Prophet By Man ..

what an opener this had some dope assed multies Haz, and it seemed to be a personal rhyme sorta shit dunno if it was, but it followed the flow and the closer has hella dope, man this was a dope piece overall, keep bringin that fire Haz
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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