little zombie verse my homie "emphasis" wrote

[Borat]

So I totally love the vocab use and vision in this... ill shit, enjoy the read. I will return any feed.


The stench of death and burnt flesh emits like incense, each of my steps possibly peak the interests of the restless, so my best guess is to move in silence, and with the sirens leading violence off in the distance, the dead cant witness my existence. With persistence I make my way with quickness away from the sickness. Shit! in an instance, I see some children quickly turning victims, Quick! A split decision, should I shift my vision and continue the mission… Who would really miss em’?
Its Hell on Earth and still I see their Heavenly worth, Damn it’s a curse this hero complex always coming first, so I grab the silenced 9 at my side aim it straight at their eyes, drop the 3 zombies, then the kids start to cry, I provide the quiet sign, and find a safer place to hide, now we reside inside this church, finding a peace of mind, for whatever its worth, we’ll weather the worst.
While the kids are crying for their mommy, we’re stacking up benches at the entrance, they keep asking are we safe? I answer hardly! You kill the brain you kill the zombie, now try surviving an army, I hear something alarming, tell the kids to go hide, and keep the exit in mind, and what do I find another zombie and I’m… Grabbing for the trench spike, hold tight, waiting till its in sight, ignore the pain in my leg, jump and lunge in its brain, wipe the stain off the blade, then I survey the scene, say its time to leave, then awake from this dream.

[QwarterZ]

this was purdy dope....I'm diggin' it simply because it was on some different level type ish
then again...you do drop a lot of Zombie ish these days....can we say Obsession? lol

either way it's no problem really....although the structure could be fixed up
it'll make it a lil' easier to read....very nice visually tho', I agree

......I'd say keep writing.....but.....riiiiight

[FlipSide]

yea it was simple...but it was delivered well.. Id say ...im not lookin at anything in this verse but the entertainment level... I actually painted the church with dude n kids putting benches by the door...it was very good in my opinion

[NoVeL]

This Was Crackk Rockk, It Puts My Zombie Verse Ta Shame!!