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Re: A Late Night Drop...

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LoL this was delirous and abstract.
i wonder if you first few bars have anything to do with your religion question? i liked the suicidal rant followed my self reflection and finished off with a snap back to reality.
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it was a little random and unorthodox, but clever and tactful at the same time. good shit man.
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Yes god, the bets off, just me and you, for the record, on the record//
Better yet turn off the record, pause a second, lets talks a second//

those lines remind me of some Royce shit
very nice tho', I see your experimentation with flows
I'm diggin' it, and as always coming with a shitload of lyrics
Rugged bout to be my favorite MC on here.....



































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Post by complexity »

I thought this was real dope and clever. I don't have the energy to leave in depth feedback.

The on the record line, I thought was pure. And Royce's line was a completely different play on words. He was talking about physically offing a record instead of actually shutting it off.

"I'm feeling hungry, it's almost 4:20am, I see an empty plate so drop a feed// "

^could have been doper

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Shits crazy... i read it twice and there were parts where i totally lost the flow... but in retrospect i dont think u write for that... Its more of an impact piece... well i liked this
That was something I could do and feel original, a real individual, it was simple too//
I got expelled 6 times in 5 years, yep, all the way back to when I was in middle school//
Dunno why?.... Just dam matter of factly put
All I did was watch movies and read, walk the streets while my imagination salivates//
Get beat up by mexicans, smoke by the river, maybe tag up a back alley way//
Wow lol...again .. like it aint shit...oh what u do today... then rugg says this ^^^ lol

Dude this is wayyyy Dopeness...
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That was something I could do and feel original, a real individual, it was simple too//
I got expelled 6 times in 5 years, yep, all the way back to when I was in middle school//

Love the multies and how it all fit in together

How's this for a punch, "your mom must be dirty cuz all she do is swallow seeds"//
Off the top, good huh?, but I'm out cuz it seems like everywhere I go halloween seems to follow me

Nice closer.

Feelin' this. Kind of twisted but nice!
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