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Tension

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Take a step to the pyramids, peep through the eyes of pharoahs
who smile to a broken sky, the sphinx bringer of peril
over-analyzed apparel, everythings golden, the Jurassic 5
flip'd over futures, hidden tarots, within a mansion defined
the faction arrived, spoiled by riches and construction thru slavery
the building blocks of entrapment in death, it was all severity
the tyranny was heat, pressure and struggle, dephictin' quicksand
a hour glass flip'd and foiled with the tickin' tick it granted...
passin' the anatomy of the truest, the body slip'd from contusions
as the spoken lost influence, hatred embalm'd em, frail Anubis
the clueless sought the blindess, and found growth in Osiris
the eyelids awoke, but death followed forseen by what the eyes is
beauty was the rarest, Cleopatra's name was sung through the ages
and the media ate this shhh up their mindstate was that of scarabs
constructed screen plays, simulated lifestyles within the dreamscape
now as the fiends lay, heated up and ready for change such as leeway
the ancient days screamed tragedy, set up for such a candid speech
the pressure of it is murderous, the politics literally killed Marc Anthony
wive's followed suit, memory clean, the future wouldnt reminsce of a past life
a past world, or realize the beauty they'd rather go with a asp bite...........


ehhhh haven't written for awhile
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Re: Tension

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ay this was pretty dope amigo. a couple parts that prolly coulda flowed better. but im an audio head, so what do i know. i liked the wordage. i dont really read scripts cus its hard ta picture or hard to flow with it. but this one, i was able to spit out loud to an instro. shit sounded good. so thanks man, for helpin me sound good. haha. good shit dawg
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word! ^^^ its a different dance alltogether i must say..but the egyptian topic is one seldom used but rich in subtopics...so u gotta lot of info to work with...i like the slavery depiction.....imagery was good as well...good read overall
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You're on some other shit bro, but this is dope

passin' the anatomy of the truest, the body slip'd from contusions
as the spoken lost influence, hatred embalm'd em, frail Anubis
the clueless sought the blindess, and found growth in Osiris
the eyelids awoke, but death followed forseen by what the eyes is
beauty was the rarest, Cleopatra's name was sung through the ages
and the media ate this shhh up their mindstate was that of scarabs

that whole part was my favorite and really stood out to me
I don't drop rhymes all the time, but when I do, I prefer to spit fire
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