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Life and Aftermath

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I'm known for lashin out, I'm known for never backing down
But I'm a man now, maybe its time to let go of common ground
Devote my life to somethin else, when all I do is make noise and sound
Fill the cupboards and hold my tongue instead of going to town
On my enemies, but I'm impatient, I hate just hanging around
I feel like I'm a rat thats been drowned, and theres nothing to do
I should find somebody to love and redirect affection to them from my crew
It's way overdue, I shouldn't battle, I should tell my opponent thank you
For making me more then a face in a crowd, get rid of anything I have to lose
Because I've elevated to a 'What'shisface' from a simple 'Huh, who?'
I thought my career'd last as long as a vampires lifespan, whats left to prove?
I've crafted my masterpiece now I'm just admiring the view, need to get new
Get fresh, get out, I need to ditch the crib and deposit money on a house
Ditch the one night stands I need to find a suitable spouse
Spend my time wisely instead of hanging with friends and fucking about
But I'm in doubt, I chose the long way round what if I chose the wrong route?
Too scared to take a shortcut, supposedly a window opens when a door shuts
But I know from my youth people keep all entrances under key and lock
And they dont answer the door in the night when I decide to try and knock
I'm standing here in this life, outside, watching life slip by the hands of clocks
If it doesnt all work out, I should buy some cyanide pills, swallow the lot
After all I'd just be accelerating the end of life, inside a church, inside a box
I hold the scissors to cut the hand that ties the knot, I think I've forgot
No matter which way I try to wriggle in the spiderweb of life I'm caught
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Post by FlipSide »

Word that was deep dude.... I feel a lot of what was said on there... and give u props for putting it out there.. Stayed on point the whole time as well.. it has long lines but i think with memorizing this i would be a good heartfelt audio.. with work ...u shouldnt stop droppin tho
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Post by Borat »

I like the emotion in this aswell kid. Keep writing man I enjoy watching you progress you are getting better and better. I'm excited to see what the future holds for you. Here is my favorite part...

I thought my career'd last as long as a vampires ifespan, whats left to prove? I've crafted my masterpiece now I'm just admiring the view, need to get new Get fresh, get out, I need to ditch the crib and deposit money on a house Ditch the one night stands I need to find a suitable spouse Spend my time wisely instead of hanging with friends and fucking about But I'm in doubt, I chose the long way round what if I chose the wrong route? Too scared to take a shortcut, supposedly a window opens when a door shuts

I have felt like that before. Props on the drop man

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thanks.. i m impress myself sometime that i getting better so thanks for the feed n uppin anyone!!
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Post by HKX »

Lines I like lol

I feel like I'm a rat thats been drowned, and theres nothing to do
I should find somebody to love and redirect affection to them from my crew

vampire like was dope as hell 2 haha

I'm standing here in this life, outside, watching life slip by the hands of clocks
If it doesnt all work out, I should buy some cyanide pills, swallow the lot

overall dis was pretty dope man keep dropping 8/10
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really 8/10 damnn!!!
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