a deep key(real)

[FlipSide]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WsICCWQobBg

Imma nomad with no mom n no dad
I hope that hope jabs and brings home back
Imma throw back what those lack with dope raps
That close traps and ropes hacks that hate Tack** (old name)
Revered the times when the fam was near
Been years since i feel the words most hear
A four letter dagger that angers my styles
ta manufacture my fractured ego ta reach
a stature on top of the ladder Wont breath
Till it happens im scrappin like bums ta liven
My own life with strife thats positive
Im inquisitive in the way that i live
So ive grown a bit, fear? in the cabinet
Im fine wit it if its end then i welcome it
this long ive lived and been thru more shit
than most imagine.. i welcome a casket
Fuck it im tired and need some rest kid
But im fully vested in advancing to a nexus
Im restless till my goals is accomplished
This faith i abolish cuz my heart is godless
I get brolic and burn bridges 2 prospects
just to prove points that had no effect
I reject with a reflex the bullshit of weak raps
That spew trash and views lack a real fact
I point that realness is realer then structure
I been under the thunder so i weaken the summer
The clouds of the somber frequent my number
Seekin a figure..that of a father but linger
when neglet is a reson im a fatherless father
why bother when problems is lager than i fathom
a fanthom of a what i was at all angles
my life is a beat and my heart is sample.........

[Munteskue_lol]

Holy shit, I think this was the best you've done yet.

Perfect flow- I rapped while I was reading just to test it out.

Good vocabulary- keep that shit up.

Heart felt and emotion- no fake stuff, all real... Keep it up.

On topic the whole time.

Better multis and metaphors then I've seen from you, but still could use a little practice and improvement. Not to say that yours weren't good, cause they were. It's just a field I would suggest you work on.

Would sound great on audio- make this a track!

8.9/10

[FlipSide]

i wish i had this beat...imma ask messia for it...
Thanks for the feed back catch..

[- Mutual -]

yeah i got the beat too ya mayne

yeah this was nice the lines were shorter than i thought but it flowed well had a nice consistent flow scheme

I reject with a reflex the bullshit of weak raps
That spew trash and views lack a real fact
I point that realness is realer then structure
I been under the thunder so i weaken the summer
The clouds of the somber frequent my number
Seekin a figure..that of a father but linger

dope dude dope this was a very good read and i look forward to hearin the track

[QwarterZ]

So ive grown a bit, fear? in the cabinet
Im fine wit it if its end then i welcome it
this long ive lived and been thru more shit
than most imagine.. i welcome a casket
Fuck it im tired and need some rest kid
But im fully vested in advancing to a nexus

I'm diggin' this shit!!!!!!!!!!!!

your really elevating fast dude
I sense a deafshady repeat..........for the lulz
either way I'm diggin' this
flow's nice with the beat can't wait to read it

[Munteskue_lol]

..

[FlipSide]

you aint hear...im three people...Im Flip ..Qwarterzone and deaf shadys cousin LULZ

[Munteskue_lol]

if that were true it would really fuck with my head

[QwarterZ]

fuck with your head.................for the lulz