meh its been a while so i said fuck it...

[Lawgix]

just figured i'd drop somethin in here... cause its been a while so check it

just shit i wrote

i've been spittin it audio but let me convert it to text
word is a mess you herbs better expect this work to impress

i'm sure to progress this nervous infect sure to inject
venom like tention when i put this rope round ur neck

to the nervous vets who claim their worthless checks
work?!? whats next? i'll be a wal mart greeter at 60 n be a nerdish pet

to these stupid common brats who put on a blue
vest and jet to the next aisle that hasn't been worked yet but i digress

i'm slappin hoes into check rollin with sets not common to man
ur the type to start a fight n have 20 dudes in a van

blindside me hit my blindspot with a fan its obvious
u can be a pussy and yet still act like a man!

what? ur tough cause u roll with the Klan? you tard!
i'll crucify your punk ass on the crucifix u burnt in my yard!

you white supremisist bastards wearin a white night gown
your wives might frown from the fact i turned ur inards inside out

hung u upside down from a branch knocked the lights right out
of the street so the cops couldn't see who let this pride fight out

let the blood gush down to ur head so ur head aches
impregnate ur daughter cause i said i'd fuck her till the bed breaks

if the mother comes in and shes hot i'll fuck her too
i bet he didn't know this skinhead married into a family of Jews

so who the fuck am i a white guy who might lie to get
on a cd with a nice guy charge him n fill him with white lies

with the price this high we might sky rocket
into the night sky hit the airport n catch us a night flight to

LA with our disc n a gun walk into a station
n say spin this shit or its best to run

while my comrade has just fled out the door cause the
police have come tellin me to drop the weapon... u kiddin? this is fun!

step into the booth and take over the whole sessions
shoot like 4 dj's cause they were soothin their erections

stop a fuckin track thats already in mid progression
get on the fuckin mic n just wreck it with no restin

swat team baracades the door to smitherens
as i slaughter every one of em plus the captain with a guillotine

take off into the night like i'm a villian in a comic
if batman tracks me down i'm fillin him with vomit

went to 7-11 and held every fucker in there hostage
told em if they make sound their gettin shot n thats a promise

broke into a church as they were payin a dead man some homage
snuck into a confession booth and watched the preacher fuck an ostrich

oh God not again look at this corny fucker Lawgix he can't rock it
i swear theres no stoppin me i'm too sick with it honest

[complexity]

just figured i'd drop somethin in here... cause its been a while so check it

just shit i wrote

i've been spittin it audio but let me convert it to text
word is a mess you herbs better expect this work to impress

Woah...dope line

i'm sure to progress this nervous infect sure to inject
venom like tention when i put this rope round ur neck

Decent.

to the nervous vets who claim their worthless checks
work?!? whats next? i'll be a wal mart greeter at 60 n be a nerdish pet

Decent

to these stupid common brats who put on a blue
vest and jet to the next aisle that hasn't been worked yet but i digress

Alright.

i'm slappin hoes into check rollin with sets not common to man
ur the type to start a fight n have 20 dudes in a van

That makes sense.

blindside me hit my blindspot with a fan its obvious
u can be a pussy and yet still act like a man!

Right.

what? ur tough cause u roll with the Klan? you tard!
i'll crucify your punk ass on the crucifix u burnt in my yard!

I like how the flow continued on that first bar.

you white supremisist bastards wearin a white night gown
your wives might frown from the fact i turned ur inards inside out

That is actually a clever rhyme.

hung u upside (down) from a branch knocked the lights right out
of the street so the cops couldn't see who let this pride fight out

First bar was dope, second was iffy.


let the blood gush down to ur head so ur head aches
impregnate ur daughter cause i said i'd fuck her till the bed breaks


Funny.

if the mother comes in and shes hot i'll fuck her too
i bet he didn't know this skinhead married into a family of Jews

Haha.

so who the fuck am i a white guy who might lie to get
on a cd with a nice guy charge him n fill him with white lies

It stays with the theme, I really liked where that bar was going and the end disappointed me a bit.

with the price this high we might sky rocket
into the night sky hit the airport n catch us a night flight to

LA with our disc n a gun walk into a station
n say spin this shit or its best to run

I'll say them two (four) bars go together really well, that is about it.

while my comrade has just fled out the door cause the
police have come tellin me to drop the weapon... u kiddin? this is fun!

step into the booth and take over the whole sessions
shoot like 4 dj's cause they were soothin their erections

Once again, some dope content, I'm not liking the end.

stop a fuckin track thats already in mid progression
get on the fuckin mic n just wreck it with no restin

Nah.

swat team baracades the door to smitherens
as i slaughter every one of em plus the captain with a guillotine

take off into the night like i'm a villian in a comic
if batman tracks me down i'm fillin him with vomit

Nah. That doesn't work for me.

went to 7-11 and held every fucker in there hostage
told em if they make sound their gettin shot n thats a promise

I like.

broke into a church as they were payin a dead man some homage
snuck into a confession booth and watched the preacher fuck an ostrich

Lol. I think the setup could have made a bit more sense for the ostrich line.

oh God not again look at this corny fucker Lawgix he can't rock it
i swear theres no stoppin me i'm too sick with it honest

K.
------------------------

I liked how you stayed on the theme the whole time. Some moderately funny parts, a couple weak lines, a few fillers, a relatively good drop though.

I'd give it a 8.5/10.

Good read. Real easy to get through unlike my last piece.

[Lawgix]

appreciate the feed... i don't really do text styles... not my forte... but i figured its been a while so i thought i'd get somethin down in here... haha 8.5 not bad for it bein a while and it was somethin i just thought up at 3 am... i already tried spittin it but it really didn't go well on a beat so i figured i'd put it in here

haha uppin for more feed!!!

[-MenaCe-]

Good shit law, im feelin the whole shyt!

Good to see you drop somethin in here.

[Momeijah]

The Flow And Rhymescheme Were Solid, it Would Sound Good On Audio. The Content For The Most Part Was So-So, Some Lines Were Real Original And Stood Out, Others Were Blabber. it's Aright To Blabber On Audio if u Just Want People Bumping ur Shit Or Dancing To it at a Club Without Paying Attention To The Lyrics, But in Text Form There's a Lot More Emphasis On Filler. That Said, There Wasn't Too Much Filler And The Drop Kept Me interested Throughout, Just a Couple Of Lines Were a Bit.... Wtf ? Like The Ostrich One, The Vomit One And The Whole KKK Tangent u Went Down Lol. Still i Was Feeling it, Keep it Up Whether it's in Here Or The Chamber.

[Lawgix]

thanx for the feed so far!!!! lookin for more!!!!!!

[Quix]

FLOW WAS ON, NOTHING tooooo SPECIAL!!

shit was a nice read tho fam!!

[Munteskue_lol]

It was pretty tight dude. I agree with you though, it doesn't work on a beat. But you have lyrical talent and that was the point of this, so coo shit

[MOEstradamus]

i've been spittin it audio but let me convert it to text
word is a mess you herbs better expect this work to impress
nice multis and flow was on point
i'm sure to progress this nervous infect sure to inject
venom like tention when i put this rope round ur neck
flow a lil off at the end still nice tho
to the nervous vets who claim their worthless checks
work?!? whats next? i'll be a wal mart greeter at 60 n be a nerdish pet
lol this made me laugh
to these stupid common brats who put on a blue
vest and jet to the next aisle that hasn't been worked yet but i digress
k
i'm slappin hoes into check rollin with sets not common to man
ur the type to start a fight n have 20 dudes in a van
i liked this on point ez multi tho still nice
blindside me hit my blindspot with a fan its obvious
u can be a pussy and yet still act like a man!
i see what your gettin at not feelin the ez multis and simple rhymes
what? ur tough cause u roll with the Klan? you tard!
i'll crucify your punk ass on the crucifix u burnt in my yard!
this was nice not to complex and had a good point
you white supremisist bastards wearin a white night gown
your wives might frown from the fact i turned ur inards inside out
flow a lil off to me and was a very played way to end this bar
hung u upside down from a branch knocked the lights right out
of the street so the cops couldn't see who let this pride fight out
no not feelin the back to back to back out rhymes
let the blood gush down to ur head so ur head aches
impregnate ur daughter cause i said i'd fuck her till the bed breaks
nice multis lol nice lil bar here
if the mother comes in and shes hot i'll fuck her too
i bet he didn't know this skinhead married into a family of Jews
not understanding where the jew is comen from but i may be missin sumtin nice lil bar
so who the fuck am i a white guy who might lie to get
on a cd with a nice guy charge him n fill him with white lies
liked the multis on point
with the price this high we might sky rocket
into the night sky hit the airport n catch us a night flight to

LA with our disc n a gun walk into a station
n say spin this shit or its best to run
not really feelin these could have reworded to make it better
while my comrade has just fled out the door cause the
police have come tellin me to drop the weapon... u kiddin? this is fun!

step into the booth and take over the whole sessions
shoot like 4 dj's cause they were soothin their erections

stop a fuckin track thats already in mid progression
get on the fuckin mic n just wreck it with no restin

swat team baracades the door to smitherens
as i slaughter every one of em plus the captain with a guillotine

take off into the night like i'm a villian in a comic
if batman tracks me down i'm fillin him with vomit

went to 7-11 and held every fucker in there hostage
told em if they make sound their gettin shot n thats a promise

broke into a church as they were payin a dead man some homage
snuck into a confession booth and watched the preacher fuck an ostrich

oh God not again look at this corny fucker Lawgix he can't rock it
i swear theres no stoppin me i'm too sick with it honest
that last bit got hot i was like damn nice damn nice damn nice and then i lost all of it in your last couple bars

all together tho this was nice shit was feelin some parts and other parts i didnt like but flow was on point and multis where good is this gona be an audio or just for shits and gigs?

[DaPrince]

Overall it was good, but the opening 2 or 3 bars and the last bar were exceptional. Nice drop, I'd like to hear this on audio.

[FlipSide]

I think there was some seriously demented shit in there... put together the right way tho..so it was some off tha wall type shit i can digg... Original too with the radio station u-dig....A couple bars had me trippin too...over all it was a fun read... and i can see this as an audio...maybe not the specific beat u wrote it too.. but for me..the more times i re read and memorize certain parts.. it gets easier to manhandle the instro...just me tho

[deafshady]

you white supremisist bastards wearin a white night gown
your wives might frown from the fact i turned ur inards inside out

that really clever line also most of ur works i feel that whole thing also that

LA with our disc n a gun walk into a station
n say spin this shit or its best to run

it is tru!!